for A New Life12/1/2012 c1 
2Vamp712
FEFE'S FAMOUS COOKIES?! EPIC
I enjoyed your first chapter very much, you actually use descriptions on the surroundings and of the characters. You also bring your characters to life, I truly felt the sadness and loss. Wow the dad is stupid and got a bad dog, why would you not get the shots as soon as you get the dog or get a new one or something, I mean who didn't see someone's death coming from that. OH, one part I got confused on is, you said the gravestone is next to the porch stairs, is that the place she was buried or is she at a cementary, I was curious because I thought that burying a human in your property is illegal.
2Vamp712FEFE'S FAMOUS COOKIES?! EPIC
I enjoyed your first chapter very much, you actually use descriptions on the surroundings and of the characters. You also bring your characters to life, I truly felt the sadness and loss. Wow the dad is stupid and got a bad dog, why would you not get the shots as soon as you get the dog or get a new one or something, I mean who didn't see someone's death coming from that. OH, one part I got confused on is, you said the gravestone is next to the porch stairs, is that the place she was buried or is she at a cementary, I was curious because I thought that burying a human in your property is illegal.
3/4/2012 c5 Mady
Haha my quotes have gone viral! Everyone I am kinddda hyper... not crazy- just to clear things up :D Anyways you must post more... I don't know if you posted everything that you emailed me on here- but if you didn't you should. Pleassssse write more, my friend! (again- my friend sounds crepperish or like an old guy is talking.. i dont know which one)
Haha my quotes have gone viral! Everyone I am kinddda hyper... not crazy- just to clear things up :D Anyways you must post more... I don't know if you posted everything that you emailed me on here- but if you didn't you should. Pleassssse write more, my friend! (again- my friend sounds crepperish or like an old guy is talking.. i dont know which one)
10/10/2011 c5 Guest
Sorry for the incomplete review (The one with the tribute to Mr. Owl- I accidently pressed some button while tryign to skip a line.) Sooooo just read that comment first... then go to this one:
Wow! what a great cliffhanger :( (I'm angry because though it is a great cliffhanger, you need to write the next chapter!) What a great place to leave off though, I can't tell if Connor is going to decide to be a vampire or not! Oh and before I get to far into my praise for this chapter, I love Nutella, and yes I didn't think that it would taste good either, I was SUPRISED! I love the developing of Victor (he seems way nicer than Lucian) he was kinda like creppy at first, you know scary, but then his kindness was revealed in his caring comments, he already seems to have the potential to be the replacement for the father Connor is lacking (literally.)
Thx for the great chapter! Don't stop writing ;)
Your #1 Fan :D
Sorry for the incomplete review (The one with the tribute to Mr. Owl- I accidently pressed some button while tryign to skip a line.) Sooooo just read that comment first... then go to this one:
Wow! what a great cliffhanger :( (I'm angry because though it is a great cliffhanger, you need to write the next chapter!) What a great place to leave off though, I can't tell if Connor is going to decide to be a vampire or not! Oh and before I get to far into my praise for this chapter, I love Nutella, and yes I didn't think that it would taste good either, I was SUPRISED! I love the developing of Victor (he seems way nicer than Lucian) he was kinda like creppy at first, you know scary, but then his kindness was revealed in his caring comments, he already seems to have the potential to be the replacement for the father Connor is lacking (literally.)
Thx for the great chapter! Don't stop writing ;)
Your #1 Fan :D
10/10/2011 c5 Guest
Sina San-
OK Mr. Owl also (I'm helping you take over the world mwah ha ha ha) OvO Yes, that's right, you can take over the world... It better be for a good cause or I will seriously hurt you!
Sina San-
OK Mr. Owl also (I'm helping you take over the world mwah ha ha ha) OvO Yes, that's right, you can take over the world... It better be for a good cause or I will seriously hurt you!
10/10/2011 c4 Guest
Sina-San-
The rewards for reviews get better and better! Lol :) I know I probably won't get any cuz of the fact that you might not write another chapter for a while :( OHHHHHHH I forgot to say, I LOVE where this is going! I mean if Connor was changed into a werewolf, and Adam gets changed into a vampire, will they fight? (Clara referenced vamps getting mad at them or something a few chapters ago, and your summary said like war with vampires and werewolves.) Because if they eventually end up fighting against each other or something, that would be very kool! Or they don't know the other one is changed until their two group go up against each other :D Ok working on getting an account thingie ;)
-Your #1 Fan
Sina-San-
The rewards for reviews get better and better! Lol :) I know I probably won't get any cuz of the fact that you might not write another chapter for a while :( OHHHHHHH I forgot to say, I LOVE where this is going! I mean if Connor was changed into a werewolf, and Adam gets changed into a vampire, will they fight? (Clara referenced vamps getting mad at them or something a few chapters ago, and your summary said like war with vampires and werewolves.) Because if they eventually end up fighting against each other or something, that would be very kool! Or they don't know the other one is changed until their two group go up against each other :D Ok working on getting an account thingie ;)
-Your #1 Fan
10/10/2011 c3 Guest
Sina-San-
The story is getting more complex, and I'm hooked! You're welll rounded characters are getting more unique, I love how you add detail by detail, til they build up, and you feel like you know everything about the characters. I wonder what's gonna happen to Connor? Love the suspense :) THis story just gets better and better! Anyways you are such a good author that you have convinced me to join FictionPress, if I could just get a good story idea :( Thanks for the good reads, and remember don't stop writing :D
Your #1 Fan!
Sina-San-
The story is getting more complex, and I'm hooked! You're welll rounded characters are getting more unique, I love how you add detail by detail, til they build up, and you feel like you know everything about the characters. I wonder what's gonna happen to Connor? Love the suspense :) THis story just gets better and better! Anyways you are such a good author that you have convinced me to join FictionPress, if I could just get a good story idea :( Thanks for the good reads, and remember don't stop writing :D
Your #1 Fan!
10/10/2011 c2 Guest
Sina-San-
Great! Loving it! I was thinking that maybe there was just going to be one main character, but nooooooooo! I love it! I read tons of books, so I know a good author when I read one (lol.) You are definatly a good author because you are one of a limited group of authors who can balance characters perfectly, like connor and Adam. You make sure each character is well rounded and has a part in your story, because after all that's what characters are for. This story is one of the best I've read about supernatural beings and such, because you incorperate the supernaturalness into normal everyday lives-complete with well defined flaws. Please don't stop writing, I can't wait to see your books on a bestseller list, or in a bookstore!
-Your #1 Fan :D (I also commented on Chapter 1)
Sina-San-
Great! Loving it! I was thinking that maybe there was just going to be one main character, but nooooooooo! I love it! I read tons of books, so I know a good author when I read one (lol.) You are definatly a good author because you are one of a limited group of authors who can balance characters perfectly, like connor and Adam. You make sure each character is well rounded and has a part in your story, because after all that's what characters are for. This story is one of the best I've read about supernatural beings and such, because you incorperate the supernaturalness into normal everyday lives-complete with well defined flaws. Please don't stop writing, I can't wait to see your books on a bestseller list, or in a bookstore!
-Your #1 Fan :D (I also commented on Chapter 1)
10/10/2011 c1 Guest
Hey Sina-San! Great story so far ;) I really enjoyed reading it. You are really good with all of the characters, I feel like I've known them after reading your great details. The problems of the characters are so lifelike, so real (especially Connor.) The things both the teens deal with actually happens in middle and high school, which helps me(and others, I'm sure) relate to the characters even more. The only request I have is, could you add why Connor's mother's (Claudia Terry's) grave is near the porch, specifically, why not at a cementary (it's not normal.) Thank you! Don't stop writing, your work is amazing!
- Your new #1 fan!
Hey Sina-San! Great story so far ;) I really enjoyed reading it. You are really good with all of the characters, I feel like I've known them after reading your great details. The problems of the characters are so lifelike, so real (especially Connor.) The things both the teens deal with actually happens in middle and high school, which helps me(and others, I'm sure) relate to the characters even more. The only request I have is, could you add why Connor's mother's (Claudia Terry's) grave is near the porch, specifically, why not at a cementary (it's not normal.) Thank you! Don't stop writing, your work is amazing!
- Your new #1 fan!
9/25/2011 c5 3RedBloodonWhiteRoses
I like your story. I don't know why but i find myself laughing a lot through it. I hope that doesn't offend you. This is a good story and i was quiet aggravated when you didn't go back to see what happened to Adam. I WANT TO KNOOOOW! About your other story, Forbidden Love, i have a something to say to you... POST MORE! *makes a sad puppy face* Please? And i am writing/typing a story i think you might like. It's yaoi and I'm assuming you know what that is. I love how you portray your characters and i will keep reading your post...posting? IDK! Anyway keep up the great work!
WAFFLES ARE FOOD OF THE GODS!
RedBloodonWhiteRoses
3RedBloodonWhiteRosesI like your story. I don't know why but i find myself laughing a lot through it. I hope that doesn't offend you. This is a good story and i was quiet aggravated when you didn't go back to see what happened to Adam. I WANT TO KNOOOOW! About your other story, Forbidden Love, i have a something to say to you... POST MORE! *makes a sad puppy face* Please? And i am writing/typing a story i think you might like. It's yaoi and I'm assuming you know what that is. I love how you portray your characters and i will keep reading your post...posting? IDK! Anyway keep up the great work!
WAFFLES ARE FOOD OF THE GODS!
RedBloodonWhiteRoses
8/30/2011 c5 28U88LY
There's an owl giving me concert tickets if I review and eat nutella? Sounds good. And the button is blue by the way :P Okay but onto the story. Cliffhanger again? You have a terrible habit my dear friend :P I think the point of reviewing is to help either encourage the writer or say what could be improved in their writing. So I would like to say that if you re-read your chapters before uploading then you might see that you're chapters don't always... flow? Not the right word but something similar to that. Maybe you already do but I don't know. Definately update soon!
28U88LYThere's an owl giving me concert tickets if I review and eat nutella? Sounds good. And the button is blue by the way :P Okay but onto the story. Cliffhanger again? You have a terrible habit my dear friend :P I think the point of reviewing is to help either encourage the writer or say what could be improved in their writing. So I would like to say that if you re-read your chapters before uploading then you might see that you're chapters don't always... flow? Not the right word but something similar to that. Maybe you already do but I don't know. Definately update soon!
8/30/2011 c4 8U88LY
Chucky's enjoying the chocolate muffin and you make me laugh :P anyway good chapter, as always. And yes, I could tell you had certain rough parts but writers block happens to everyone... er, all writers heh. But if you know you had a particularly difficult time writing a chapter then I would recommend re-reading it once or twice before posting it. Although, it was still pretty good :)
Chucky's enjoying the chocolate muffin and you make me laugh :P anyway good chapter, as always. And yes, I could tell you had certain rough parts but writers block happens to everyone... er, all writers heh. But if you know you had a particularly difficult time writing a chapter then I would recommend re-reading it once or twice before posting it. Although, it was still pretty good :)
8/26/2011 c3 8U88LY
Both of them? Both of them got bit? hmmmm... I'm not sure what to think of that :P. Black lab. Send him to me and his name is Chucky, just so you know :).
Both of them? Both of them got bit? hmmmm... I'm not sure what to think of that :P. Black lab. Send him to me and his name is Chucky, just so you know :).
8/26/2011 c2 8U88LY
Just a couple errors every now and then but other than that good. Lollipop lollipop oh lolli lolli lolli lollipop! (like that song) hehe ~8U88LY
Just a couple errors every now and then but other than that good. Lollipop lollipop oh lolli lolli lolli lollipop! (like that song) hehe ~8U88LY
8/25/2011 c1 8U88LY
I really like it and defintely think you should continue on with it. Good job and I look forward to reading your next chapter. This virtual cookie is yummy :P
I really like it and defintely think you should continue on with it. Good job and I look forward to reading your next chapter. This virtual cookie is yummy :P