for Love In The Mud7/28/2012 c3 
21LyssBliss
Hey, there! Hilarious story you have here, couldn't stop smiling the whole time. I just love the way you started off. The chicken dream. Way to get my attention! I love how you make this story humorous but still have a great plot. I'm interested to see what happens next!
A few things I want to point out:
You do have a few typoes here and there but not a big deal!
In chapter one, in the conversation at the skatepark right after Cody is watching the clouds, you used a lot of tags. Not that it's really a big deal, but the flow of the conversation was choppy cause you had "she said" "he asked" at the end of every line of dialogue. I understand it's hard to get rid of the tags in a conversation with 3 people but try to see if you can get rid of some of those tags.
Besides that, not really much wrong here. Excited to see what's next! Current favorite character is Ken... what will happen if he becomes a 3rd wheel? O.O We shall have to see!
21LyssBlissHey, there! Hilarious story you have here, couldn't stop smiling the whole time. I just love the way you started off. The chicken dream. Way to get my attention! I love how you make this story humorous but still have a great plot. I'm interested to see what happens next!
A few things I want to point out:
You do have a few typoes here and there but not a big deal!
In chapter one, in the conversation at the skatepark right after Cody is watching the clouds, you used a lot of tags. Not that it's really a big deal, but the flow of the conversation was choppy cause you had "she said" "he asked" at the end of every line of dialogue. I understand it's hard to get rid of the tags in a conversation with 3 people but try to see if you can get rid of some of those tags.
Besides that, not really much wrong here. Excited to see what's next! Current favorite character is Ken... what will happen if he becomes a 3rd wheel? O.O We shall have to see!
12/23/2011 c3 3Kill.Them.Tonight
This story definitely caught my attention. Super fun idea, especially with Cody's personality! For sure going to follow this!
Also, I agree with the first reviewer, your writing is a little rough around the edges, but only minor things like slips in consistent tense (past, present, etc), and every once in a while there's an error in punctuation. However, all in all I love the story and I really am looking forward to seeing it completed!
~KTT
3Kill.Them.TonightThis story definitely caught my attention. Super fun idea, especially with Cody's personality! For sure going to follow this!
Also, I agree with the first reviewer, your writing is a little rough around the edges, but only minor things like slips in consistent tense (past, present, etc), and every once in a while there's an error in punctuation. However, all in all I love the story and I really am looking forward to seeing it completed!
~KTT
12/23/2011 c3 3TheEvergreenShadow
Awesome awesomeness... update quickly PLEEEEAAASSSE! -sniff- it's been too long :'( Heheh!
3TheEvergreenShadowAwesome awesomeness... update quickly PLEEEEAAASSSE! -sniff- it's been too long :'( Heheh!
12/23/2011 c3 ARulzz
U've gotta finish this. This is awesome. U should rlly complete it. Boy was tht amazing or wht. Its so superb. U should rlly complete it. Grl, u've gotta complete it. Thx 4 the wonderful story. Update soon. GooD LucK.
U've gotta finish this. This is awesome. U should rlly complete it. Boy was tht amazing or wht. Its so superb. U should rlly complete it. Grl, u've gotta complete it. Thx 4 the wonderful story. Update soon. GooD LucK.
9/29/2011 c2 1leavesfallingup
It sounds like the only person in the trio who isn't aware of Xavier's feelings is Cody. That was a surprise ending. Will it be followed by a blush or a right hook?
1leavesfallingupIt sounds like the only person in the trio who isn't aware of Xavier's feelings is Cody. That was a surprise ending. Will it be followed by a blush or a right hook?
9/29/2011 c1 leavesfallingup
Cody sounds like an interesting girl. It is only natural that her friends would begin to notice that she is a girl. Testosterone and Pheremones are very troublesome, insistent little pests. I like the interaction between the three friends and the trust that their parents show in allowing the impromptu sleepovers.
The question is: if one boy starts seeing her as a girl, what will happen to the other boy? And what will happen to the trio's friendship?
Cody sounds like an interesting girl. It is only natural that her friends would begin to notice that she is a girl. Testosterone and Pheremones are very troublesome, insistent little pests. I like the interaction between the three friends and the trust that their parents show in allowing the impromptu sleepovers.
The question is: if one boy starts seeing her as a girl, what will happen to the other boy? And what will happen to the trio's friendship?
9/5/2011 c2 5I am Sadie Eye of Isis
Another good chapter FlamingInk57! Thank you so much for posting. It made me laugh. I didn't see any mistakes, but I'll review it more later when I get the chance. Post more soon! Please!
-Kite
5I am Sadie Eye of IsisAnother good chapter FlamingInk57! Thank you so much for posting. It made me laugh. I didn't see any mistakes, but I'll review it more later when I get the chance. Post more soon! Please!
-Kite
9/5/2011 c2 Snaps4You
I love the concept of your story and Cody is hilarious! I can't wait to see what happens next! Please update soon! :)
I love the concept of your story and Cody is hilarious! I can't wait to see what happens next! Please update soon! :)
9/5/2011 c2 3TheEvergreenShadow
Mmmm, cranberry juice... FOCUS WOMAN! Must... review... but the juice is so good!
LOL, anyway, sounds like a potentially funny & awesome story (clicks subscribe)!
It is now your job to satisfy my random/ funny meter... okay, why did a fat king just appear in my head? I'm not even kidding; a fat king with a smug face was patting is belly just now in my head when I said that... weird... it seems that the word "satisfy" triggered it...
oh well! update soon!
3TheEvergreenShadowMmmm, cranberry juice... FOCUS WOMAN! Must... review... but the juice is so good!
LOL, anyway, sounds like a potentially funny & awesome story (clicks subscribe)!
It is now your job to satisfy my random/ funny meter... okay, why did a fat king just appear in my head? I'm not even kidding; a fat king with a smug face was patting is belly just now in my head when I said that... weird... it seems that the word "satisfy" triggered it...
oh well! update soon!
9/4/2011 c1 3Hannah D
I really like this story and love the comfrontable atmosphere the characters have between each other! Can't wait for more! More more more more more more more! :D
3Hannah DI really like this story and love the comfrontable atmosphere the characters have between each other! Can't wait for more! More more more more more more more! :D
9/4/2011 c1 5I am Sadie Eye of Isis
All I could think about reading this story was...DUDE. Pick out a different pronoun every so often! I read the summery and I was like "This...this is the same story, right?" I can't wait to see what happens! Please keep writing!
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5I am Sadie Eye of IsisAll I could think about reading this story was...DUDE. Pick out a different pronoun every so often! I read the summery and I was like "This...this is the same story, right?" I can't wait to see what happens! Please keep writing!
I 3 chickens