for The Champions11/7/2011 c21 
3Writer of the apocolypse
the villians royalty this time? i wonder what they'll have to fight in the arena.
3Writer of the apocolypsethe villians royalty this time? i wonder what they'll have to fight in the arena.
11/6/2011 c20 Writer of the apocolypse
great chapter, it'll be cool to see more of the heroes, or at least have some reference to them. cant wait for next chapter
great chapter, it'll be cool to see more of the heroes, or at least have some reference to them. cant wait for next chapter
11/2/2011 c1 Writer of the apocolypse
I just read Chapter One, and i can tell i'm gonna enjoy reading the rest.
I just read Chapter One, and i can tell i'm gonna enjoy reading the rest.
10/26/2011 c16 fly2fly
You're doing right. The story is very interesting and I love reading it.
You're doing right. The story is very interesting and I love reading it.
10/7/2011 c9 tmturner
That was fun & interesting! So far, it sounds like Julienne should pick Will.
That was fun & interesting! So far, it sounds like Julienne should pick Will.
10/5/2011 c7 tmturner
Great rescue! And I love Melissa's reaction to Andrew informing her they'd be going out on a date. Classic!
You've got a really fun story going here. The traffic sucks, though. I'm trying to get some of my fanfic readers to venture over here, but so far they haven't. I'll try & send some readers your way if I can.
Great rescue! And I love Melissa's reaction to Andrew informing her they'd be going out on a date. Classic!
You've got a really fun story going here. The traffic sucks, though. I'm trying to get some of my fanfic readers to venture over here, but so far they haven't. I'll try & send some readers your way if I can.
10/2/2011 c6 1tmturner
I loved this chapter all the way up to the Alabama redneck. Very funny! I think Will is my favorite character.
But I'm in Montgomery, Al, born & raised. A bigot would have gotten the same reaction here as you wrote your characters to have. People don't tolerate that kind of behavior, and in my travels, I've found Chicago, Detroit, and Columbus, OH, to be radically more racist than Alabama. Even suggesting a racist idea will get you beaten up or sued in a heartbeat. And I don't think I've ever heard a white person younger than 70 use the 'n word.' Not cool.
1tmturnerI loved this chapter all the way up to the Alabama redneck. Very funny! I think Will is my favorite character.
But I'm in Montgomery, Al, born & raised. A bigot would have gotten the same reaction here as you wrote your characters to have. People don't tolerate that kind of behavior, and in my travels, I've found Chicago, Detroit, and Columbus, OH, to be radically more racist than Alabama. Even suggesting a racist idea will get you beaten up or sued in a heartbeat. And I don't think I've ever heard a white person younger than 70 use the 'n word.' Not cool.
9/30/2011 c5 tmturner
Great fight! I love how invisiboy dealt with the cop.
(Hey, check out my story? I'm new here.)
Great fight! I love how invisiboy dealt with the cop.
(Hey, check out my story? I'm new here.)
9/30/2011 c4 tmturner
Another good chapter. I like this story! (Not a big fan of the boys' foul language, though.) The dialogue is entertaining and it keeps the story moving. Good job!
Another good chapter. I like this story! (Not a big fan of the boys' foul language, though.) The dialogue is entertaining and it keeps the story moving. Good job!
9/30/2011 c1 tmturner
Good job with the dialogue introducing the characters' personalities. Well done.
Good job with the dialogue introducing the characters' personalities. Well done.
9/26/2011 c3 fly2fly
Nice story,keep going, I want more!
Nice story,keep going, I want more!