10/4/2011 c1 8Olena Light
This was...okay I guess, but I just have a problem with their ages. I mean 17 and 26? That's hardly a difference. You should've made the guy older, in his late thirties at least. Or maybe you could've made the girl 14 or 13-really young for a 26 year old. But 17 and 26? I don't get it. I have friends dating guys who are around that age and I'm 16. Also, the police wouldn't care so much about these two dating so much that they'd actually come after him like that...she's 17, almost 18...And even if they did care that much, and the two really did have to worry about cops, then why couldn't they have waited until she was legal til they had sex? Just one year away...As long as there's no evidence of sexual activity with a minor, then nothing can really be done, and even if there was evidence, like I mentioned above, they would not surround a 26 year old like that for having sex with someone 17. They'd probably just send a cop to his house lol Anyway, seriously you should really reconsider their ages...Also a lot of this just seemed overly dramatic if you wanna look at that, like the whole sex on the beach, running out of time thing-it seemed very forced. Anyway take this as you will I guess. Keep writing

(oh and truthfully I thought they were going to be father and daughter, cuz he kept saying "my baby")