for The Desperate Choices of Annabel Watson9/9/2015 c7 
3Smartgirl94
I bet she frowned was because she is thinking that thats his child. Please update soon :D
3Smartgirl94I bet she frowned was because she is thinking that thats his child. Please update soon :D
9/8/2015 c7 augmentedDREAMS
This chapter was great. And I am loving the accuracy about Indian culture. Last chapter, I was a little worried about it but now I'm not worried anymore. :)
I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon, you're doing great.
This chapter was great. And I am loving the accuracy about Indian culture. Last chapter, I was a little worried about it but now I'm not worried anymore. :)
I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon, you're doing great.
8/20/2015 c6 3perfect.fluke
Ooh I like Ranvir! Make him save her! Can't wait for the next update! I'm glad you're writing again!
3perfect.flukeOoh I like Ranvir! Make him save her! Can't wait for the next update! I'm glad you're writing again!
8/19/2015 c6 augmentedDREAMS
Yes, this story is back! And omg, an Indian character! This is great. I love this development! I just hope you get the specifics right. Like a common misconception I have seen going around is that arranged marriages are forced on us. That isn't correct.
Anyway, I can't wait to read more about Annabel, Ryan and Ranvir. Also, couple of things. You may want to add some pagebreakers when you change from Annabel's POV to others'. And there are subtle changes in tense littered all about.
Yes, this story is back! And omg, an Indian character! This is great. I love this development! I just hope you get the specifics right. Like a common misconception I have seen going around is that arranged marriages are forced on us. That isn't correct.
Anyway, I can't wait to read more about Annabel, Ryan and Ranvir. Also, couple of things. You may want to add some pagebreakers when you change from Annabel's POV to others'. And there are subtle changes in tense littered all about.
8/19/2015 c5 augmentedDREAMS
I am very glad to see that you are going to continue this story. I hope you update soon and that the new chapter is great.
Your story has great potential and I have high hopes. :)
I am very glad to see that you are going to continue this story. I hope you update soon and that the new chapter is great.
Your story has great potential and I have high hopes. :)
8/11/2013 c4 RebeccaMonroe
Oh what a shame ( ( you dont carry on this story ( ! it is great ! Carry on please !
Oh what a shame ( ( you dont carry on this story ( ! it is great ! Carry on please !
4/25/2012 c4 crazypsycho
hey :D its been awhile and i am still waiting for the updates. hope its gonna be posted soon!
hey :D its been awhile and i am still waiting for the updates. hope its gonna be posted soon!
2/11/2012 c4 Cassandra Elizabeth
This is a really great story. The plot is pretty good. I have read all of your other stories on here and they all seem to have the same theme. The lead male forces the lead female to become their sort of "sex slave". I would like to see something different from this because it seems that you are just full of ideas because of the plot of your stories. I also think that you need work on the formatting of the dialogue. You tend to either put a coma at the end of the sentence then the quotation marks. This isn't necessary because all you need to do is to put a period at the end. For example you said:
"Annabel, do you need help putting on the dress?," Susan asked through the door.
Everything in this sentence is right except for the part where you put a coma after the question mark. That is not unnecessary. You just end the sentence and put the quotation mark. I hope that I was able to help you.
-PurpleEmoChick
This is a really great story. The plot is pretty good. I have read all of your other stories on here and they all seem to have the same theme. The lead male forces the lead female to become their sort of "sex slave". I would like to see something different from this because it seems that you are just full of ideas because of the plot of your stories. I also think that you need work on the formatting of the dialogue. You tend to either put a coma at the end of the sentence then the quotation marks. This isn't necessary because all you need to do is to put a period at the end. For example you said:
"Annabel, do you need help putting on the dress?," Susan asked through the door.
Everything in this sentence is right except for the part where you put a coma after the question mark. That is not unnecessary. You just end the sentence and put the quotation mark. I hope that I was able to help you.
-PurpleEmoChick
1/5/2012 c4 Guest
Please write more soon!
Please write more soon!
1/2/2012 c4 Lady
this is such a great story. I most definitely absolutely enjoyed it. I just can not wait to read the next chapter. Please please update i just love this story!:)
this is such a great story. I most definitely absolutely enjoyed it. I just can not wait to read the next chapter. Please please update i just love this story!:)
11/23/2011 c4 Liley
Awwww cute chapter x) Ryan acts so lovingly toward Annabel~
And when he was younger, i think he was in love with her =)
Thanks you so much for updating this! I love this story =)
Awwww cute chapter x) Ryan acts so lovingly toward Annabel~
And when he was younger, i think he was in love with her =)
Thanks you so much for updating this! I love this story =)