for Vida Sin Amor9/2/2014 c21 S.Peridot
I really enjoyed reading this story even though in the beginning I hated how she acted with him. You have a LOT of spelling mistakes and some incomplete sentences. Have a good day :)
Sarah
I really enjoyed reading this story even though in the beginning I hated how she acted with him. You have a LOT of spelling mistakes and some incomplete sentences. Have a good day :)
Sarah
7/21/2014 c21 
2bubublacz
Hi would just like to leave you a comment :D
I really liked your story, though there were a lot of spelling mistakes and I think that the characters would sometimes be out of character :/ But I still enjoyed it :) Thanks!
2bubublaczHi would just like to leave you a comment :D
I really liked your story, though there were a lot of spelling mistakes and I think that the characters would sometimes be out of character :/ But I still enjoyed it :) Thanks!
7/20/2014 c15 bubublacz
Had to do a double take to see if she really was the one who said it hahaha :D
Had to do a double take to see if she really was the one who said it hahaha :D
12/26/2012 c21 4FlamesFromPurpleFire
Amazing, wonderful, fantastic story! This work of art totally deserves wayyyyy more reviews and favorites! Thanks for writing such an amazing story! (:
4FlamesFromPurpleFireAmazing, wonderful, fantastic story! This work of art totally deserves wayyyyy more reviews and favorites! Thanks for writing such an amazing story! (:
10/18/2012 c21 37SuzyDiego
Wow, that was an awesome story. There were some grammar and syntax issues throughout but not enough to detract from the story. It was absolutely one of the best I have had the pleasure of reading. Just a friendly suggestion, you may want to get the help of a beta reader, the grammar mistakes would be hard to catch on your own and fresh eyes can catch them more easily.
Again, fantastic job. That was amazing!
37SuzyDiegoWow, that was an awesome story. There were some grammar and syntax issues throughout but not enough to detract from the story. It was absolutely one of the best I have had the pleasure of reading. Just a friendly suggestion, you may want to get the help of a beta reader, the grammar mistakes would be hard to catch on your own and fresh eyes can catch them more easily.
Again, fantastic job. That was amazing!
10/6/2012 c13 Guest
Wow. I'd never be that forgiving. If my dad said something like that to me, I'd flat out tell him that I'm moving out (which I can legally do now), and I'd never speak to him again.
Wow. I'd never be that forgiving. If my dad said something like that to me, I'd flat out tell him that I'm moving out (which I can legally do now), and I'd never speak to him again.
10/6/2012 c2 Guest
I knew it the second he licked her :P
I knew it the second he licked her :P
8/12/2012 c6 R
I've only made it this far, and I think your story is great. You could use a bit of work on your grammar though. A few small things, a couple of typos, simple stuff.
I've only made it this far, and I think your story is great. You could use a bit of work on your grammar though. A few small things, a couple of typos, simple stuff.