for Pieces of Amber11/1/2011 c1 
32Who Is This Girl Anyway
I noticed a mistake in your summary("love" should be "life", I think), which could do with fixing as it could put people off reading, which would be a shame given that this looks like a good story.
Amber seems believable as a self-conscious teenage girl in her sister's shadow. She doesn't seem like an author's darling or too whingey. There's a fine line between believably angsty and whiny bore(Stephanie Meyer, I'm looking at you), but you walk that line well.
I also like how Amber describes Darius as a gem, as it shows how valuable a decent friend would be to her and how much she wants to be loved.
Katie.
32Who Is This Girl AnywayI noticed a mistake in your summary("love" should be "life", I think), which could do with fixing as it could put people off reading, which would be a shame given that this looks like a good story.
Amber seems believable as a self-conscious teenage girl in her sister's shadow. She doesn't seem like an author's darling or too whingey. There's a fine line between believably angsty and whiny bore(Stephanie Meyer, I'm looking at you), but you walk that line well.
I also like how Amber describes Darius as a gem, as it shows how valuable a decent friend would be to her and how much she wants to be loved.
Katie.
10/28/2011 c1 R.M.QuiQui
Reviewing via the Review Game:)
I really liked this story. I love how you got into to the mind of a twin who think she's inferior to her sister even though they mostly look alike. The names you picked for the story are really cool too. The description of the people and places were extensive but not in a tedious or uber-long way. That takes talent. It flowed nicely and was interesting to read. All in all its a great read.
Reviewing via the Review Game:)
I really liked this story. I love how you got into to the mind of a twin who think she's inferior to her sister even though they mostly look alike. The names you picked for the story are really cool too. The description of the people and places were extensive but not in a tedious or uber-long way. That takes talent. It flowed nicely and was interesting to read. All in all its a great read.