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11/17/2011 c1 Eden Green
'...We loved each other so'. That line feels a little stilted to me, and disrupts the flow somewhat. I would suggest a little word play instead. I do however love your last two lines. They were brilliant. Well done!
11/16/2011 c1 Bee
Ah creepy boy but very good :)

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