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11/29/2011 c1 1444musicfreak44
This is a really great story, there were a few capitals that didn't need to be there, but overall it was great :D

I hope to read more of your writing!
11/28/2011 c1 6EmmyLee1
I like the idea of this story, however there were some capital letters that shouldn't have been there. There were also some mistakes with grammar. But overall I did like the story, and the ending was definitely not what I expected :)
11/28/2011 c1 3sickness-kun
I liked it. It was very creative and I laughed at the end. Best of luck in any stories you write in the future.

-Randy
11/26/2011 c1 12Storm of the Ice
Ashia,

Personally I think that your plot is really good, and so are the dialogue and descriptions of Lemon. But there were some grammar mistakes, and I found a few capitals that weren't supposed to be there.

If you would heed my advice and change it, I would be grateful! :D Other than that though, it was great, and the end sent a jolt of electricity up my back. (No kidding!)

Keep on writing,

~Ice~
11/25/2011 c1 little victorian girl
nc sherina hehe sai 2
11/25/2011 c1 6Acceleorder
I have a feeling Chapter 2 will be great :)

'to infinity and beyond' sort of reminds me of Toy Story. I'm a Romance freak too XD
11/24/2011 c1 1Ember Vee
CHAPTER TWO, BABE! :D
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