for You, Me & FortyThree Degree Tilted Hats1/8/2012 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
I really enjoyed reading that. The way you portrayed the characters was done really well, and I like how you mirrored the ending and the begining. The characters - like most of yours - are seemingly typical, but once you read on it's clear there's more to them, and the way you twist that is done really well. Awesome stuff.
99Dreamers-RequiemI really enjoyed reading that. The way you portrayed the characters was done really well, and I like how you mirrored the ending and the begining. The characters - like most of yours - are seemingly typical, but once you read on it's clear there's more to them, and the way you twist that is done really well. Awesome stuff.
11/27/2011 c1 dust and glitter
This is genuinely lovely. I adore your narrative, the writing style you have is incredibly unique and because of this I feel sometimes your dialogue doesn't fit as well in this piece. It's not a case of what's being said being out of place, it just felt sliiiiightly disjointed in areas but that was barely noticeable. Overall, this was an adorable and well-written one shot, keep up the amazing writing :)
D&Gx
This is genuinely lovely. I adore your narrative, the writing style you have is incredibly unique and because of this I feel sometimes your dialogue doesn't fit as well in this piece. It's not a case of what's being said being out of place, it just felt sliiiiightly disjointed in areas but that was barely noticeable. Overall, this was an adorable and well-written one shot, keep up the amazing writing :)
D&Gx
11/26/2011 c1 8urtenshii
This is nice :)
The emotions were pretty intense but still I liked how the female protagonist tried to push him away. It was definitely interesting. Though it was pretty cliche, you still managed to make it really nice. I like how you do your stories and I definitely love your plots :)
Frankly though, I think this would be better off as a longer story than as a one-shot. Even having an additional of three to five chapters will do. It just seemed, i dunno, kinda rushed I guess?
Anyway, I hope to read something from you again!
Keep on writing! :)
8urtenshiiThis is nice :)
The emotions were pretty intense but still I liked how the female protagonist tried to push him away. It was definitely interesting. Though it was pretty cliche, you still managed to make it really nice. I like how you do your stories and I definitely love your plots :)
Frankly though, I think this would be better off as a longer story than as a one-shot. Even having an additional of three to five chapters will do. It just seemed, i dunno, kinda rushed I guess?
Anyway, I hope to read something from you again!
Keep on writing! :)
11/26/2011 c1 29YasuRan
I did notice that you went through most of the motions associated with the usual young adult romance: the jock, the studious girl, the love-hate relationship. But there was some definite depth hinted at, so I forgive you completely XD.
I really enjoyed Ana as a character. Despite this being a one-shot, you got under her skin perfectly. We saw past her studious, slightly neurotic side and got a glimpse of how her mind works, what she thinks of Michael at first and how that changes from the few interactions they have. I find her fear of opening up to him to be quite believable, considering how we find her Dad left her and her Mum doesn't seem that interested in her life. The blushing, the nerves, I could relate to all of that as someone who's been through the whole shindig at college.
Lastly, the structure was really well-executed. I liked how you connected the opening and closing scenes through the previous events that join in the middle. It added more poignancy, which a lot of stories in this genre lack.
29YasuRanI did notice that you went through most of the motions associated with the usual young adult romance: the jock, the studious girl, the love-hate relationship. But there was some definite depth hinted at, so I forgive you completely XD.
I really enjoyed Ana as a character. Despite this being a one-shot, you got under her skin perfectly. We saw past her studious, slightly neurotic side and got a glimpse of how her mind works, what she thinks of Michael at first and how that changes from the few interactions they have. I find her fear of opening up to him to be quite believable, considering how we find her Dad left her and her Mum doesn't seem that interested in her life. The blushing, the nerves, I could relate to all of that as someone who's been through the whole shindig at college.
Lastly, the structure was really well-executed. I liked how you connected the opening and closing scenes through the previous events that join in the middle. It added more poignancy, which a lot of stories in this genre lack.
11/26/2011 c1 6deadkitty1
An adorable story and I like how you tell it in increments from how she got him in her mind, to how they met, and then back to the beginning from how they kissed. So I don't think it's that cliched. Maybe a little bit...
I felt the story was too quick but it's expected from a one-shot. I like that Ana took the initiative and that she has a snarky personality. It's a cute story. Nice job!
6deadkitty1An adorable story and I like how you tell it in increments from how she got him in her mind, to how they met, and then back to the beginning from how they kissed. So I don't think it's that cliched. Maybe a little bit...
I felt the story was too quick but it's expected from a one-shot. I like that Ana took the initiative and that she has a snarky personality. It's a cute story. Nice job!