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7/15/2012 c1 76The Autumn Queen
I'm guessing you've already solved that problem with the stanzas as your most recent poems don't have that issue.
You could just spam the lines in between if all else fails though. I know someone uses '.' as a line on its own to differentiate between stanzas. Sometimes, when the line things on the Document manager aren't working, I use '...'.

I feel that the structure doesn't work too well with this poem. Something about it begs for free-verse, so it reads a little stilted as it is. A little stiff. Particularly with the rhymes.

I really like the addition of the question [you ready to go?] Religion, the typical death, philosophy and all that stuff all rolled into that one phrase - now that's what poetry's about (or one of the things anyway). I wonder if anyone really can be ready? Including those people who commit suicide...but it's not like we can ask...sorry, it's probably weird to be talking about this...

Ohana from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
5/13/2012 c1 Shadows of a Dream
It's difficult to write a rhyming poem that actually is good with the words chosen, and I really like this. Somehow, in being concise it comes across very strong and direct, and the imagery is great. Descending, mind reeling, pain rending, blood running, all that is just great. :)

- Shadows
12/3/2011 c1 8Dark Blue Lover
OMG. Quite rushed, but it fits the poem. Not so sure what to make of this - the narrator seems to hold quite some wrath for that "you" person.

I'm surprised what you can do with rhyming poems. Love how it breaks during the last lines.

For the HTML... have you tried bunching together the lines (with Shift + Enter) where there shouldn't be a paragraph break? It might work, I'm not sure though.

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