for Get Me Out of Here12/23/2011 c1 prostock69
This was a lovely story. Your writing style is fantastic! I enjoyed the nerdy virgin being deflowered by the experienced stud very much. I love one-shots and you did a fantastic job with this one. I especially loved the following except of Nick and Robert's conversation at the party:
"Head, now THERE'S a great idea," Nick exclaimed.
"Well, hopefully you're flexible enough to give yourself a good time!" Robert settled himself into the driver's seat of his car and moved to close the door, but Nick had quickly blocked the move with a palm against the inside of the window.
I laughed out loud reading that! So freaking funny! And at this:
"Because I think we could have a great time together," Nick finally responded. "And you would too if you took that stick out of your ass and let me replace it with something bigger but less sharp."
OMG! He has Micky Mouse tattooed on his ass! lol. Too funny but so cute!
p.s. Honestly, I didn't miss you not writing the "action." Anymore, I'm more interested on how they get there (the build up.)
This was a lovely story. Your writing style is fantastic! I enjoyed the nerdy virgin being deflowered by the experienced stud very much. I love one-shots and you did a fantastic job with this one. I especially loved the following except of Nick and Robert's conversation at the party:
"Head, now THERE'S a great idea," Nick exclaimed.
"Well, hopefully you're flexible enough to give yourself a good time!" Robert settled himself into the driver's seat of his car and moved to close the door, but Nick had quickly blocked the move with a palm against the inside of the window.
I laughed out loud reading that! So freaking funny! And at this:
"Because I think we could have a great time together," Nick finally responded. "And you would too if you took that stick out of your ass and let me replace it with something bigger but less sharp."
OMG! He has Micky Mouse tattooed on his ass! lol. Too funny but so cute!
p.s. Honestly, I didn't miss you not writing the "action." Anymore, I'm more interested on how they get there (the build up.)
12/23/2011 c1 
24Limited Edition
Yay I'm the first reviewer! Nice to see you back. I laughed out loud several times during the dialogue. The ending was such a tease! If it's a one-shot at least let them finish off! Haha.
Hm, as for con-crit, the adverbs get tangled a bit sometimes. It might be good to cut some of them out to improve the flow. I'd like if this one continued! It was really cute.
24Limited EditionYay I'm the first reviewer! Nice to see you back. I laughed out loud several times during the dialogue. The ending was such a tease! If it's a one-shot at least let them finish off! Haha.
Hm, as for con-crit, the adverbs get tangled a bit sometimes. It might be good to cut some of them out to improve the flow. I'd like if this one continued! It was really cute.