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2/24/2012 c1 12BangxDitto
I loved the apparent anger in thIs piece.

Therapeutic poetry always turns out amazing;

I'd say my favorite bit was the angel wings section.
1/22/2012 c1 61AuthorNinjaEarth
A prime example of saying something so profound in a very profound way. Excellent work, Anna!
1/15/2012 c1 Punslinger
"...I'm refusing to take a sip of your bombastic drink..." What a neat put-down, with just the right note of scorn. This is a very powerful, poetic affirmation of life in spite of its drawbacks.
1/15/2012 c1 115Random-Idiocity
Hey! As always brilliant work. ''I believe we should not be afraid of departure'' absolutely true. ''because you think that what has worth is physically touching the stars'' - sometimes people have difficulty grasping what they cannot see, feel, or touch. Which is why faith / trust is always broken. Anyways, I thought you did a really good job writing this. Keep it Up!
1/15/2012 c1 1Serenity's Human
Like these lines a lot:

living like a delicate flower doomed to

shrivel up at the first breath of winter frost

or existing like a keg of dynamite always anxious of matches - All very great images.

"my cosmic lattee" - very nice.

Overall:

I really love it. It works as a great short story as well. I will say that it sounds like a conflict also of beliefs without being the main cause of why they are leaving.

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If you have time, could you review my story:

http:/www.fictionpress.com/s/2988494/1/The_First_Vampire

I know it says 9 chapters but because I couldn't figure out how to do a line break... I ended up breaking the sections into 'chapters' so it's not even that long. I believe one chapter was 2 paragraphs :P

Thanks ahead of time.
1/15/2012 c1 167nickyO
Powerful message.

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