for Imperfectly Perfect2/6/2012 c1 
4Fainting In Coils
Nice poem. I like that it's dark without veering into cliche, and the last stanza (especially the last two lines) is really great. The only part I'm iffy on is the line "taught you how to love and raise." It's not that there's anything wrong with it per se, I simply don't quite understand what the 'raise' is referring to. Anyway, good job, and keep up the good work!
4Fainting In CoilsNice poem. I like that it's dark without veering into cliche, and the last stanza (especially the last two lines) is really great. The only part I'm iffy on is the line "taught you how to love and raise." It's not that there's anything wrong with it per se, I simply don't quite understand what the 'raise' is referring to. Anyway, good job, and keep up the good work!