for Chess Master7/17/2012 c1 
30Neuravinci
Hhaha, this is cute!
I love how you described the competitiveness so well: and you did just that, you showed, didn't tell.
I could almost imagine the 15yo girl, her face set in a scowl as she let her little brother win. You did well to describe everything without overkill.
Overall, I think it was such a cute little story :)
30NeuravinciHhaha, this is cute!
I love how you described the competitiveness so well: and you did just that, you showed, didn't tell.
I could almost imagine the 15yo girl, her face set in a scowl as she let her little brother win. You did well to describe everything without overkill.
Overall, I think it was such a cute little story :)
6/7/2012 c1 13Isis 47
Very interesting indeed. This is a lot like a situation I had about checkers, except this is a little more dramatic.
You characterized them very well, though I would've liked more on the college girl. Mmmm . . . that's it.
-Isis
13Isis 47Very interesting indeed. This is a lot like a situation I had about checkers, except this is a little more dramatic.
You characterized them very well, though I would've liked more on the college girl. Mmmm . . . that's it.
-Isis
4/15/2012 c1 4OneOriginalThing
Aw that's so cute, its really easy to see that she cares for her younger brother, but cares about herself as well. i loved this story altogether, it gave a more realistic attitude towards the idea, and how sometimes older sisters get in the way of our fun.
4OneOriginalThingAw that's so cute, its really easy to see that she cares for her younger brother, but cares about herself as well. i loved this story altogether, it gave a more realistic attitude towards the idea, and how sometimes older sisters get in the way of our fun.