
10/31/2013 c1
5ZChan-Kerokero
I suggest adding more of the characters thoughts and feelings
Little bit...

I suggest adding more of the characters thoughts and feelings
Little bit...
1/3/2013 c6
2Facella
I really like your story. But it's all a bit rushed. And I think you could add in a bit more descriptions. There's mostly just dialogue and it makes it kind of hard to really relate to Noah. I mean, sure, it's horrible what he's going through, but how does he feel?
And PLEASE don't end this here. It wouldn't be satisfying at all! ;_;

I really like your story. But it's all a bit rushed. And I think you could add in a bit more descriptions. There's mostly just dialogue and it makes it kind of hard to really relate to Noah. I mean, sure, it's horrible what he's going through, but how does he feel?
And PLEASE don't end this here. It wouldn't be satisfying at all! ;_;
3/7/2012 c5
16xXBladeXx9
Ohhhhhmigosh~!
Was NOT expecting that one right there. Wooo ._.
Definatelyyy looking forward to that next update. Wow /

Ohhhhhmigosh~!
Was NOT expecting that one right there. Wooo ._.
Definatelyyy looking forward to that next update. Wow /
3/1/2012 c4
1Katie-apple-easy-mac
You have a great storyline although i think you could do more describing. If you need some help with the description you should try reading some other male on male stories so you can detail yours more.

You have a great storyline although i think you could do more describing. If you need some help with the description you should try reading some other male on male stories so you can detail yours more.
2/29/2012 c4
71Subbie
it would be nice to have some sort of time line to start like, "few hours later or few weeks later" as it seems sorta jumpy, but Good job elsewise!

it would be nice to have some sort of time line to start like, "few hours later or few weeks later" as it seems sorta jumpy, but Good job elsewise!
2/23/2012 c3
71Subbie
Nice job, but you're right, way too short. Good job tho...
On the other hand, I'm having a helluva time uploading stuff, are you?

Nice job, but you're right, way too short. Good job tho...
On the other hand, I'm having a helluva time uploading stuff, are you?
2/21/2012 c2
16xXBladeXx9
;A;
This story...is beautiful. It really is ._. you had me giggling and gasping while reading this, its just..wow.
You just got yourself a dedicated reader, and if you need any help- any at all- just let me know and I'll be more than happy to help~
Keep up the awesome T_T

;A;
This story...is beautiful. It really is ._. you had me giggling and gasping while reading this, its just..wow.
You just got yourself a dedicated reader, and if you need any help- any at all- just let me know and I'll be more than happy to help~
Keep up the awesome T_T
2/20/2012 c2 huh i dunno
So far, so good. :) Except, the chapter was a little short, but it was still interesting. I think it's funny how his client is in love with him. Can't wait for the next chapter
So far, so good. :) Except, the chapter was a little short, but it was still interesting. I think it's funny how his client is in love with him. Can't wait for the next chapter