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7/31/2012 c1 Mem The Great
I can't believe that this hasn't gotten any reviews story makes you want to know more, what happened to the earth? Why is that face mask needed? What will happen next? Don't worry, that's a good thing! The transition from third to first person point of view is really awkward. The story would be better if it was all in third. I really found myself connecting with Jess, I found myself really understanding and caring for him in just a few paragraphs. That is an amazing skill that few authors have. You have talent, don't waste it.

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