for Sports Stories12/4/2012 c17 
6Ed Harley
Perhaps he's like Rain-man. He just says Tebow instead of definitely definitely…
6Ed HarleyPerhaps he's like Rain-man. He just says Tebow instead of definitely definitely…
6/11/2012 c1 TinfoilKnight
Quidditch. It's a real thing, colleges do it.
Just in case you needed ideas...
Quidditch. It's a real thing, colleges do it.
Just in case you needed ideas...
4/5/2012 c5 Frap
Okay so you share in my pain that they actually made Poker such a huge sport. SERIOUSLY!
SO, I love the jab at their arms having to be five pounds...LOL! and yes, the commercial break sounds so familiar. If not Viagra than Cialis,when the time is right...LOL!
Well another great jab at ESPN, and I'm going to get with more of this later. I did want to give you some feedback and check out some other stories before I hit the sack. Till later, man!
Okay so you share in my pain that they actually made Poker such a huge sport. SERIOUSLY!
SO, I love the jab at their arms having to be five pounds...LOL! and yes, the commercial break sounds so familiar. If not Viagra than Cialis,when the time is right...LOL!
Well another great jab at ESPN, and I'm going to get with more of this later. I did want to give you some feedback and check out some other stories before I hit the sack. Till later, man!
4/5/2012 c4 Frap
I take it your a sports fan...LOL!
Okay this one was not as tight as the others. I know what you are saying but you got a lot of tense issues.
In some parts of your story you are telling the story from your point of view and using the wrong tense like, making the Mets out to be singular when it's plural. You could say a Met when you talking about the thought of one member and then say the group, but at times we get confused with which one you're speaking of.
Just watch that. This was funny with the whole jumping thru the plexiglass window bit, but just watch out for sloppiness with your fun of teams you don't like.
I like how you set them up and got your point across of how the teams sell the "wolf tickets" but can't put up so they have to shut up.
I know you probably won't go back and fix this due to when you actually worked on this, but a meager dusting will straighten out the issues I saw.
I take it your a sports fan...LOL!
Okay this one was not as tight as the others. I know what you are saying but you got a lot of tense issues.
In some parts of your story you are telling the story from your point of view and using the wrong tense like, making the Mets out to be singular when it's plural. You could say a Met when you talking about the thought of one member and then say the group, but at times we get confused with which one you're speaking of.
Just watch that. This was funny with the whole jumping thru the plexiglass window bit, but just watch out for sloppiness with your fun of teams you don't like.
I like how you set them up and got your point across of how the teams sell the "wolf tickets" but can't put up so they have to shut up.
I know you probably won't go back and fix this due to when you actually worked on this, but a meager dusting will straighten out the issues I saw.
4/5/2012 c3 Frap
BRAVO!
I like this one with all it's quirky ness and the "yips"...What the hell is that?
But anyway. I don't know the professionals if you are using professional people, but I like how your writing is easy to identify with when it comes to the feelings of anger, frustration, and of course revenge.
The dark figure, and the mystery surrounding him, was well written and well played.
Bravo, man bravo.
BRAVO!
I like this one with all it's quirky ness and the "yips"...What the hell is that?
But anyway. I don't know the professionals if you are using professional people, but I like how your writing is easy to identify with when it comes to the feelings of anger, frustration, and of course revenge.
The dark figure, and the mystery surrounding him, was well written and well played.
Bravo, man bravo.
4/5/2012 c2 Frap
A nail bitter...I dont' think so but definitely a bat swinger. Yeah, I've been at putt-putt when folks are taking like forever to make a shot and I'm like..."You're not a freaking pro, hit it already!"
So the feelings of frustration were well displayed and the tone of annoyance was definitely there.
Thank God for birds...LOL!
A nail bitter...I dont' think so but definitely a bat swinger. Yeah, I've been at putt-putt when folks are taking like forever to make a shot and I'm like..."You're not a freaking pro, hit it already!"
So the feelings of frustration were well displayed and the tone of annoyance was definitely there.
Thank God for birds...LOL!
4/5/2012 c1 Frap
Totally hillarious man. I guess you had to show them what team was boss! Yeah. I liked how you put this together, but you can just give us just a tad bit more detail. I guess you just plan to write the blips of things that you find ESPN don't do well.
I can say I wish you threw more action with the dog and the attack, but I understand you were going with the funny surprise.
Well I'm going to check them all out and I just want to tell you thank you for being loyal and hardworking for the forum.
Frappe
Totally hillarious man. I guess you had to show them what team was boss! Yeah. I liked how you put this together, but you can just give us just a tad bit more detail. I guess you just plan to write the blips of things that you find ESPN don't do well.
I can say I wish you threw more action with the dog and the attack, but I understand you were going with the funny surprise.
Well I'm going to check them all out and I just want to tell you thank you for being loyal and hardworking for the forum.
Frappe
3/29/2012 c6 34DanielStalwart
Its good to be a god of your own stories ahahaha. Evil but you know it's all fake and fancy.
Your series and the tales of the whatever are the ones that had lately inspired my random writings about sadism and sex. Darn I need to get back to writing meaningful stories. It's fun while it lasted and I don't myself writing random crap forever.
Check out chapter two of "lonely men series". Third one is coming out soon (I hope)
34DanielStalwartIts good to be a god of your own stories ahahaha. Evil but you know it's all fake and fancy.
Your series and the tales of the whatever are the ones that had lately inspired my random writings about sadism and sex. Darn I need to get back to writing meaningful stories. It's fun while it lasted and I don't myself writing random crap forever.
Check out chapter two of "lonely men series". Third one is coming out soon (I hope)
3/29/2012 c7 DanielStalwart
I never knew a spelling bee was considered a sport. I like the Michael Vick part even though I don't know why. I don't even know who he is.
I never knew a spelling bee was considered a sport. I like the Michael Vick part even though I don't know why. I don't even know who he is.
3/28/2012 c11 20Hokuto Uchiha
Hokuto Uchiha, reporting from Club Blitz! :D
I found this chapter hilarious! XD Great job. My favorite part was when the Red Sox guy said that no chicken was safe as long as he and the other guys were there, especially Crown XD
20Hokuto UchihaHokuto Uchiha, reporting from Club Blitz! :D
I found this chapter hilarious! XD Great job. My favorite part was when the Red Sox guy said that no chicken was safe as long as he and the other guys were there, especially Crown XD
2/20/2012 c2 34DanielStalwart
wow what an extreme perfectionist. Wait but if the bird was flying, how could it knock the ball into the hole?
34DanielStalwartwow what an extreme perfectionist. Wait but if the bird was flying, how could it knock the ball into the hole?