
8/21/2012 c16 roomofhiddenthings
Omg. You can't just end it there! I am so psyched for the next chapter. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
Omg. You can't just end it there! I am so psyched for the next chapter. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
8/18/2012 c16 ErisedHolly95
Ahh noo, you can't stop there! lol.
Great job with the story so far, I really really like the plot and where its going. I like how you've developed each character - and they all have a mysterious element to them.
As to Zane vs. Theo - I know Zane seems inconsiderate, and not boyfriend-worthy, but I think there's something else going on with him ... and that intrigues me. But then I also really don't want Theo to .. 'lose', I guess you could call it, because Theo has things going for him too ...
I think the final result should be Theo and Jasmine ... but I think she should give it a try with Zane first, and maybe they just drift apart? I dunno, I personally wouldn't be able to resist either one of them, lol. Update soon, and keep up the good work! :)
Ahh noo, you can't stop there! lol.
Great job with the story so far, I really really like the plot and where its going. I like how you've developed each character - and they all have a mysterious element to them.
As to Zane vs. Theo - I know Zane seems inconsiderate, and not boyfriend-worthy, but I think there's something else going on with him ... and that intrigues me. But then I also really don't want Theo to .. 'lose', I guess you could call it, because Theo has things going for him too ...
I think the final result should be Theo and Jasmine ... but I think she should give it a try with Zane first, and maybe they just drift apart? I dunno, I personally wouldn't be able to resist either one of them, lol. Update soon, and keep up the good work! :)
8/18/2012 c13 ErisedHolly95
Ohh I'm so glad I found this story again! I read it when you posted it and then for some time there were no updates ... I didn't know if you were going to add anymore, and I hadn't realized you'd updated. But I found it again xD
I really like the idea for this story and I'm excited to see what will happen xD
Ohh I'm so glad I found this story again! I read it when you posted it and then for some time there were no updates ... I didn't know if you were going to add anymore, and I hadn't realized you'd updated. But I found it again xD
I really like the idea for this story and I'm excited to see what will happen xD
7/14/2012 c15
15GHOTIfish
1) Pick Zane
2) Dump Zane
3) Pick Theo
Ta-daaa! Problem solved. Zane's horrible and not a healthy boyfried for anyone, and Theo's nice nd considerate, though that's an understatement. O.o I think I sound like my mom now. So not cool.
And seriously, Theo's not going to pluck up the courage to ask Jaz out officially unless he's drunk or trying to outdo his brother.
Problem solved. How was your day?

1) Pick Zane
2) Dump Zane
3) Pick Theo
Ta-daaa! Problem solved. Zane's horrible and not a healthy boyfried for anyone, and Theo's nice nd considerate, though that's an understatement. O.o I think I sound like my mom now. So not cool.
And seriously, Theo's not going to pluck up the courage to ask Jaz out officially unless he's drunk or trying to outdo his brother.
Problem solved. How was your day?
6/10/2012 c14 GHOTIfish
Oh haha...what does Zane think he has on Theo? I'm assuming here comes the funny parts next, where either Theo or Jas whups Zane or gets the rest of the gang to. Either it's going to be funny, serious, or sad, with the twins fighting over Jas...
I wonder how long it's going to be until everyone's fighting against one another...
Another great chapter and yes, we've noticed how long it's been. But no matter, it's fine, you're forgiven, some of us have waited longer.
Oh haha...what does Zane think he has on Theo? I'm assuming here comes the funny parts next, where either Theo or Jas whups Zane or gets the rest of the gang to. Either it's going to be funny, serious, or sad, with the twins fighting over Jas...
I wonder how long it's going to be until everyone's fighting against one another...
Another great chapter and yes, we've noticed how long it's been. But no matter, it's fine, you're forgiven, some of us have waited longer.
4/24/2012 c13 GHOTIfish
Take as long as you want with your updates, I don't mind! I loved this chapter and I just have to say one thing-*in a singsong voice* I think Theo LIKES her!-
But really, awesome chapter. I like how you've moved Ash to a main character and yet you manage to keep him mysterious and his past unknown. And then you introduce some...issues...in Theo, and I can't wait to see how it all plays out and what Jas does about it. And then, of course, there's Rafael, the evil villain who is now a distant problem, masked by everyday life needs. I like how school stories can do that. So. Nice chapter.
Ideas:
-As a last, stunning resort, Rafael could always attack/seige the school for some unknown reason
-Some memory of Ash's could come back 'to haunt him' and weird things could result
-Zane could start stalking Jas (ikr? that would be SO WEIRD)
And that's about all so until next time!
~The Fish
Take as long as you want with your updates, I don't mind! I loved this chapter and I just have to say one thing-*in a singsong voice* I think Theo LIKES her!-
But really, awesome chapter. I like how you've moved Ash to a main character and yet you manage to keep him mysterious and his past unknown. And then you introduce some...issues...in Theo, and I can't wait to see how it all plays out and what Jas does about it. And then, of course, there's Rafael, the evil villain who is now a distant problem, masked by everyday life needs. I like how school stories can do that. So. Nice chapter.
Ideas:
-As a last, stunning resort, Rafael could always attack/seige the school for some unknown reason
-Some memory of Ash's could come back 'to haunt him' and weird things could result
-Zane could start stalking Jas (ikr? that would be SO WEIRD)
And that's about all so until next time!
~The Fish
4/11/2012 c12
15GHOTIfish
Oh it ends with her screming again. Should've figured. Nice rescue chapter, btw.

Oh it ends with her screming again. Should've figured. Nice rescue chapter, btw.
4/6/2012 c11
4bookgeek97
Oh no... I know it was the right thing for her to slap Evan but I still hate seeing him go... I think both Theo and Zane are falling in love with her...

Oh no... I know it was the right thing for her to slap Evan but I still hate seeing him go... I think both Theo and Zane are falling in love with her...
4/3/2012 c11
15GHOTIfish
Couldn't she have just blown out the match, though? That would have been a lot easier.

Couldn't she have just blown out the match, though? That would have been a lot easier.
4/1/2012 c10
4bookgeek97
No, no, no! He can't be cheating on her! Especially not with that slut! But great chapter! :)

No, no, no! He can't be cheating on her! Especially not with that slut! But great chapter! :)
3/30/2012 c10
15GHOTIfish
Right. We all knew Evan was going to leave Jas behind (I mean...it usually happens when the main charrie runs off at the beginning of any story, right?), but it still made me sad. So. Good job. For the rest of the chapter: nice. One question-if George had killed Jas's parents and is not on their side or trying to get a message to Jas, then how did the message get to her? Cause it wasn't intentional, if you know what I mean. Awesome chapter overall!

Right. We all knew Evan was going to leave Jas behind (I mean...it usually happens when the main charrie runs off at the beginning of any story, right?), but it still made me sad. So. Good job. For the rest of the chapter: nice. One question-if George had killed Jas's parents and is not on their side or trying to get a message to Jas, then how did the message get to her? Cause it wasn't intentional, if you know what I mean. Awesome chapter overall!