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6/2/2012 c1 15Blood and Butterflies
Found you!

This is very interesting so far, and filled with emotion. The beginning kind of reminded me of Kagamine Rin's revival in Message of Regret. I liked how at the end, she had a glimpse of first-time human feeling. I will be anticipating the next chapter.
3/5/2012 c1 3cypress16
Hi,

Good start to the story. I'm not a grammarnazi so I have no criticism from that point. I found it very readable with an intriguing beginning story line. I have a soft spot for 'fish out of water' plot line characterizations and a level of believability of character action and reaction to situations. Your story has that potential.

I've added it to my favorites and look forward to the next chapter.

John
3/3/2012 c1 2SkyAdept
I like it but there's no closure on this chapter at all. Is this meant to happen? Just seems very unfinished at the moment, hope it's answered to soon!

Critically and everything, it's very good. I'm enjoying the way you write and the pace of the story even though it's rather undeveloped at this stage.

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