
11/4/2012 c1
99SilverIsamu
Beautiful wording, I enjoyed reading this piece. Its such a deep and dark description of despair. I'm sure we all have experienced this before. Once again, great job! I hope to read more from you!

Beautiful wording, I enjoyed reading this piece. Its such a deep and dark description of despair. I'm sure we all have experienced this before. Once again, great job! I hope to read more from you!
10/13/2012 c1
60AppleCrumble
Brilliant! You've written another masterpiece for the Fictionpress archieve. Amazing!

Brilliant! You've written another masterpiece for the Fictionpress archieve. Amazing!
8/23/2012 c1
6Ophelia Schmit
All of a sudden, I'm finding poems about how I sometimes feel. Very relatable poems. :D
I liked how you had one word that rhymed with every other word in the whole story/poem (not sure what to call it XD).
-Hermie
P.S. Is the picture for this story supposed to be Ophelia from "Hamlet"? It looks like it. :P

All of a sudden, I'm finding poems about how I sometimes feel. Very relatable poems. :D
I liked how you had one word that rhymed with every other word in the whole story/poem (not sure what to call it XD).
-Hermie
P.S. Is the picture for this story supposed to be Ophelia from "Hamlet"? It looks like it. :P
6/19/2012 c1
97rust phoenix
I know this feeling. You've described it well. I really like the look of this poem, too. It's got an interesting shape on the page.

I know this feeling. You've described it well. I really like the look of this poem, too. It's got an interesting shape on the page.
6/18/2012 c1
6CrazyLittleGermanMiss
you have a beautiful way with words. great work. I love it. totally going into my favorites..

you have a beautiful way with words. great work. I love it. totally going into my favorites..
6/10/2012 c1 Punslinger
Very good. This has a strong but delicate touch that makes us feel the despair without being drawn too deeply into it.
Very good. This has a strong but delicate touch that makes us feel the despair without being drawn too deeply into it.
6/5/2012 c1
14Utada Rumiko
Slightly disturbing (lol) but otherwise a beautiful poem. You're really talented. Honestly, great job.

Slightly disturbing (lol) but otherwise a beautiful poem. You're really talented. Honestly, great job.
5/29/2012 c1
81knownkonvict
I love the alliteration, "desperate despair"
Something like, despairingly desperate, or I'm not sure. Its just giving me ideas. I liked it, good job.

I love the alliteration, "desperate despair"
Something like, despairingly desperate, or I'm not sure. Its just giving me ideas. I liked it, good job.
5/26/2012 c1 TheTickingNeverStops
With words you have crafted a mind blowing perspective on this. Thank you for sharing it with the world.
With words you have crafted a mind blowing perspective on this. Thank you for sharing it with the world.
4/4/2012 c1
1La'Dispute
I realy like this poem, it has so much emotion and it's very relatable. I also like your vocabulary and word choice :)

I realy like this poem, it has so much emotion and it's very relatable. I also like your vocabulary and word choice :)