for From Beginning To End10/12/2018 c15 Guest
Honestly it's quite rudeeee immoral of you to put this story under completed when it isn't. The word hiatus exists for a reason ya know? I would have like the story a lot better if you'd had the courtesy of letting me know it wasn't finished. Now I'm just left with a bitter after taste.
Honestly it's quite rudeeee immoral of you to put this story under completed when it isn't. The word hiatus exists for a reason ya know? I would have like the story a lot better if you'd had the courtesy of letting me know it wasn't finished. Now I'm just left with a bitter after taste.
11/4/2015 c3 Guest
You write super. It's your punctuation that I worry about. But I feel reluctant to call you up on it, because it's the lack of proper punctuation that's allowing you to achieve a flow I seldom see. For eg,
I shrugged, "Is that normal?" (This is a made-up line, but uses similar punctuation you use.)
This is incorrect.
It should be:
I shrugged. "Is that normal?"
No commas before dialogue, unless it's a word related to speech. Shrugged isn't a speech word, it's a verb or action word.
But yet, when you phrased it with that incorrect punctuation, it just has a better flow, you know? Comma momentary pause. Period significant pause. The difference between reading a sentence constructed with commas and periods is huge, and changes the flow. However, if you were to publish this, a good editor will call you up on this.
You write super. It's your punctuation that I worry about. But I feel reluctant to call you up on it, because it's the lack of proper punctuation that's allowing you to achieve a flow I seldom see. For eg,
I shrugged, "Is that normal?" (This is a made-up line, but uses similar punctuation you use.)
This is incorrect.
It should be:
I shrugged. "Is that normal?"
No commas before dialogue, unless it's a word related to speech. Shrugged isn't a speech word, it's a verb or action word.
But yet, when you phrased it with that incorrect punctuation, it just has a better flow, you know? Comma momentary pause. Period significant pause. The difference between reading a sentence constructed with commas and periods is huge, and changes the flow. However, if you were to publish this, a good editor will call you up on this.
11/1/2015 c1 voidxtiles
I read this before, but can't quite recall the whole plot and the ending. Was this finished before and did you take the rest down? I remember it being a great story and I want to read it again. Please put the rest back up.
I read this before, but can't quite recall the whole plot and the ending. Was this finished before and did you take the rest down? I remember it being a great story and I want to read it again. Please put the rest back up.
9/9/2015 c15 Ann Wildsworth
This is my first time reading this story, and as I got closer to the last few chapters, I realized that the whole story wasn't up.
Maaaaan I'm heartbroken now.
Please keep us updated. I hope I can read this as a published story someday. Or just read it.
You are a talented author and I adored your story, so far.
This is my first time reading this story, and as I got closer to the last few chapters, I realized that the whole story wasn't up.
Maaaaan I'm heartbroken now.
Please keep us updated. I hope I can read this as a published story someday. Or just read it.
You are a talented author and I adored your story, so far.
8/31/2015 c15 
1jvwalton
This breaks my heart. I love coming back to this story and reading it over and over. It makes my heart happy. I'll miss you Crystal and Jake! Until we meet again!
1jvwaltonThis breaks my heart. I love coming back to this story and reading it over and over. It makes my heart happy. I'll miss you Crystal and Jake! Until we meet again!
8/30/2015 c15 Imaginary Girl xox
Please, please, please continue this! You just can't leave people hanging like that!
Please, please, please continue this! You just can't leave people hanging like that!
8/26/2015 c15 Lexie.Loo
Damn was wondering why I kept getting an 'author is updating chapters' message the other day when I was trying to finish the story, now it looks like I can't :( Certainly not my first time reading it, but can't quite recall how it wraps up :( happy you're getting it published though, just hope it comes out soon.
Damn was wondering why I kept getting an 'author is updating chapters' message the other day when I was trying to finish the story, now it looks like I can't :( Certainly not my first time reading it, but can't quite recall how it wraps up :( happy you're getting it published though, just hope it comes out soon.
3/3/2015 c36 Ophelia Lake
Now... You just need Jake. I imagine he isn't going to see it as Crystal loving him enough to let him go...bet he's going to be pretty upset...
Now... You just need Jake. I imagine he isn't going to see it as Crystal loving him enough to let him go...bet he's going to be pretty upset...
3/3/2015 c27 Ophelia Lake
Ohh My God...
Yes, I knew it! (Fist bump for your awesomeness ). Now tell Jake to wake his lazy butt up! His family needs him. Awwwwwwwwwww
Ohh My God...
Yes, I knew it! (Fist bump for your awesomeness ). Now tell Jake to wake his lazy butt up! His family needs him. Awwwwwwwwwww