for The Sailor's General Superior6/24/2012 c21 NoSlipCondition
This is getting very exciting. I'll admit I was tricked in the beginning with the bit about Alim and the general, and I had to look away for a moment. I always feel like this story reads very elegantly, even though the components are all comparatively simple. I guess it's the gestalt?
I'd use my sickness as an excuse for not reviewing, but you're still writing. haha Get well!
This is getting very exciting. I'll admit I was tricked in the beginning with the bit about Alim and the general, and I had to look away for a moment. I always feel like this story reads very elegantly, even though the components are all comparatively simple. I guess it's the gestalt?
I'd use my sickness as an excuse for not reviewing, but you're still writing. haha Get well!
6/23/2012 c21 Chibikodo
Yaaay they finally won! And I can't wait to see the exchange between Calentine and Asotegi next chapter. :)
Yaaay they finally won! And I can't wait to see the exchange between Calentine and Asotegi next chapter. :)
6/23/2012 c21 Extremyaoifangirl
Dear, iceramyst, i am following this story from the first chapter but never commented because i am not much of a writer as i am a reader. I should say this is one of my favourite reads in fp. Keep us posted and thanks for a great read.
Dear, iceramyst, i am following this story from the first chapter but never commented because i am not much of a writer as i am a reader. I should say this is one of my favourite reads in fp. Keep us posted and thanks for a great read.
6/23/2012 c21 
3nonaccount
I can't help but love Alim and I just hope that he can find some kind of healing, redemptive love rather than being the "bad guy".
Also, I've been thinking, the general's skin was described as copper in the first chapter (I think) and would appreciate some more clarification on that. Is it new copper, tarnished copper and how can his blushes be so visible? I still love this story and look forward to and devour each and every update! :)
3nonaccountI can't help but love Alim and I just hope that he can find some kind of healing, redemptive love rather than being the "bad guy".
Also, I've been thinking, the general's skin was described as copper in the first chapter (I think) and would appreciate some more clarification on that. Is it new copper, tarnished copper and how can his blushes be so visible? I still love this story and look forward to and devour each and every update! :)
6/23/2012 c21 1emmaruby
I don't think I've reviewed this story yet, how terrible of me. Can I just say I'm in love with this story and totally obsessed with it! I'm like a screaming fan-girl I love it that much.
Have you considered getting it published? I'd buy it if it was!
1emmarubyI don't think I've reviewed this story yet, how terrible of me. Can I just say I'm in love with this story and totally obsessed with it! I'm like a screaming fan-girl I love it that much.
Have you considered getting it published? I'd buy it if it was!
6/22/2012 c21 2NormaJean Beausoleil
great job. and thanks for including the a/n about the black flecks on your computer screen. lolz.
aww. i want more emotion out of cale, but he has been physically damaged lately, and taht can put a dampener on such things/developments.
*tosses you cookies* keep up the awesome work!
2NormaJean Beausoleilgreat job. and thanks for including the a/n about the black flecks on your computer screen. lolz.
aww. i want more emotion out of cale, but he has been physically damaged lately, and taht can put a dampener on such things/developments.
*tosses you cookies* keep up the awesome work!
6/22/2012 c21 Starlette420
ah how i love this. i wish cale would hurry up and realize hes in love with paraz though.
ah how i love this. i wish cale would hurry up and realize hes in love with paraz though.
6/22/2012 c21 tmelange1
Great chapter! I sort of hate and feel sorry for Alim. Not enough to see him interfering with my boys but I sorta hope he finds someone he can have. lol
Great chapter! I sort of hate and feel sorry for Alim. Not enough to see him interfering with my boys but I sorta hope he finds someone he can have. lol
6/22/2012 c21 Dragonwing
I can't believe I am still reading a story that's longer than 100k words. Where did my short attention span go? Seriously, please believe that this is very exceptional for me and it just goes to prove how awesome this story is. Most of the time, I don't even leave reviews, and I am so rarely active on FictionPress I don't even have an account. And yet, your story has gotten me so hooked I kept coming back to read the rest, when I generally forget online fictions as soon as I close the window (yes, I am an awful online reader; you need to understand that to get exactly how out of behavior this is for me! XD).
It's been a week since I caught up on all your then-published chapters, and I have been pouncing on the last two as soon as they got up. Wow. On that note, thank you very much for having a regular publishing schedule! It's awesome for those of us who can't use the alert system! :)
And so, while I am actually mustering the courage to write this review (I'm sure I'll come back to my senses soon enough and go back to being utterly lazy for the rest of my evening), I thought I'd drop a couple of remarks and questions. First, in this last chapter, when Alim instructs Cale to get up and move around the tent, there is an edition mistake: "The battle still rages; I can't see from this angle how many lay on the sides of the field, but our army is cheering heartily enough." The battle has yet to start for the day, since it happens in the scene after this one. :)
And second, just a question about something that's gotten me confused: in the first chapters, you mention a crystal or jewel or something at the base of Asotegi's neck, that glows purple on occasion (most notably the first time he sees Cale, eh). But unless I am a rotten enough reader I already forgot about it, it's never really been explained, and what strikes me as odd is that Cale never really expressed curiosity about it. Well, *I* am curious: do every dzalin get those? What are the rules about the glowing thing? Is that just the kind of things you don't mention in polite conversation, or what?
I am not really expecting a direct answer, especially since I am leaving an anonymous comment. I'm just pointing out something I, as a reader, would like to see mentioned at some point. :)
That being said, I expect I'll keep reading this story for a good while, the way this is going. Thank you so much for writing it! I am thoroughly enjoying the ride!
I can't believe I am still reading a story that's longer than 100k words. Where did my short attention span go? Seriously, please believe that this is very exceptional for me and it just goes to prove how awesome this story is. Most of the time, I don't even leave reviews, and I am so rarely active on FictionPress I don't even have an account. And yet, your story has gotten me so hooked I kept coming back to read the rest, when I generally forget online fictions as soon as I close the window (yes, I am an awful online reader; you need to understand that to get exactly how out of behavior this is for me! XD).
It's been a week since I caught up on all your then-published chapters, and I have been pouncing on the last two as soon as they got up. Wow. On that note, thank you very much for having a regular publishing schedule! It's awesome for those of us who can't use the alert system! :)
And so, while I am actually mustering the courage to write this review (I'm sure I'll come back to my senses soon enough and go back to being utterly lazy for the rest of my evening), I thought I'd drop a couple of remarks and questions. First, in this last chapter, when Alim instructs Cale to get up and move around the tent, there is an edition mistake: "The battle still rages; I can't see from this angle how many lay on the sides of the field, but our army is cheering heartily enough." The battle has yet to start for the day, since it happens in the scene after this one. :)
And second, just a question about something that's gotten me confused: in the first chapters, you mention a crystal or jewel or something at the base of Asotegi's neck, that glows purple on occasion (most notably the first time he sees Cale, eh). But unless I am a rotten enough reader I already forgot about it, it's never really been explained, and what strikes me as odd is that Cale never really expressed curiosity about it. Well, *I* am curious: do every dzalin get those? What are the rules about the glowing thing? Is that just the kind of things you don't mention in polite conversation, or what?
I am not really expecting a direct answer, especially since I am leaving an anonymous comment. I'm just pointing out something I, as a reader, would like to see mentioned at some point. :)
That being said, I expect I'll keep reading this story for a good while, the way this is going. Thank you so much for writing it! I am thoroughly enjoying the ride!
6/22/2012 c21 ice-ninjaGO
calentine and asotegi furrever3
calentine and asotegi furrever3
6/22/2012 c1 ineededaname
Needless to say, I LOVE THIS STORY!
Needless to say, I LOVE THIS STORY!
6/20/2012 c20 Dana Jameson
So many feels must not explode!...
Ok Cale needs to stop being so damn embarrassed and just tell Asotegi how he feels!
Asotegi needs to just grab Cale and kiss him! Like damn, how is he resisting when Cale keeps being so cute!
And Alim needs to get the hell outta the picture! Grr!
Great chapter!
So many feels must not explode!...
Ok Cale needs to stop being so damn embarrassed and just tell Asotegi how he feels!
Asotegi needs to just grab Cale and kiss him! Like damn, how is he resisting when Cale keeps being so cute!
And Alim needs to get the hell outta the picture! Grr!
Great chapter!
6/20/2012 c20 Chibikodo
haha If I could crow with excitement, I would. Calentine is being honest with Asotegi- so how is Asottegi going to react? :) Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
haha If I could crow with excitement, I would. Calentine is being honest with Asotegi- so how is Asottegi going to react? :) Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
6/19/2012 c20 12
thank you thank you thank you!
thank you thank you thank you!