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6/21/2012 c3 22Tenshi no Yami
Loving this as usual. Nothing wrong and I see that you started a new paragraph with each new speaker. Fantastic! Anything out of place? Not per se though the use of 'lied' should be changed. I did know what you meant though! I really did!

As for that alleged 'colorful puppet', I wanna' know more about that! :3

As for that rabit-turned- woman, that is kinda' scary.

Update this soon!

O_o
5/3/2012 c2 1leofrost
Can you keep going with the story? Thanks.;
5/1/2012 c1 Tigers and Melons
The idea is very good! I happen to love swordsman stories! but the actual writing of the story needs just a teensy bit of work. Watch out for repeating words and every time a new character speaks, you should start a new paragraph. Other than that, I look forward to seeing more!
5/1/2012 c2 22Tenshi no Yami
Ha, Hina is a little evil girl. I like her.

You finally updated! A plus.

As usual, nice chapter. Few grammar mistakes but other than that, it was good.

Liked the flashback bit.

And sixty miles? Ha, Hina just waited to throw it out there ^-^
4/19/2012 c1 Tenshi no Yami
Wani-Han and Ari-Han.

Half gator and half ant.

Check and check

It's very interesting to say the least. I wonder how Jin managed to get snared in that situation.

More please XD
4/19/2012 c1 Shado-chan
O_O That's just amazing. I've never heard of a half-aligator or half-ant, but everything about this story sounds amazing. Keep it up! :D

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