for Web of Lies8/1/2012 c1 
49SkinnyLove203
This is literally awesome - I love the concept! I am not sure if you were going for a metaphor, but if you were, then I got it :) It is really good xx
49SkinnyLove203This is literally awesome - I love the concept! I am not sure if you were going for a metaphor, but if you were, then I got it :) It is really good xx
5/17/2012 c1 15Natari Mirumura
This poem was lovely and very naturous. You got your message across just lovely, and for spiders that give you the creeps (but I adore them xD as well as all insects including the poisonous one) you wrote about them as naturally as breathing. Great job, keep it up .
15Natari MirumuraThis poem was lovely and very naturous. You got your message across just lovely, and for spiders that give you the creeps (but I adore them xD as well as all insects including the poisonous one) you wrote about them as naturally as breathing. Great job, keep it up .
5/11/2012 c1 50The Moon Howls At The Wolf
This is good, when I first started reading it, it seemed very nursery rhyme-y, but the last two stanza's along with the sophisticated word choi.ces, express the deeper message.
I love the last too lines,
"Your web of lies has been unraveled/ And I no longer hang by a thread" These are perfect and totlly relatable
Keep Writing!
50The Moon Howls At The WolfThis is good, when I first started reading it, it seemed very nursery rhyme-y, but the last two stanza's along with the sophisticated word choi.ces, express the deeper message.
I love the last too lines,
"Your web of lies has been unraveled/ And I no longer hang by a thread" These are perfect and totlly relatable
Keep Writing!
5/11/2012 c1 60AppleCrumble
How I really liked this. It was really clever. I loved the metaphor and the descriptions were brilliant :-D Loved this! :-D
Keep Writing
AC x
60AppleCrumbleHow I really liked this. It was really clever. I loved the metaphor and the descriptions were brilliant :-D Loved this! :-D
Keep Writing
AC x
5/7/2012 c1 John 8.36
This is a great metaphor for the person who entrapped you for a time. What great words you chose for this poem! It is obvious that you love the written word and that you spend a great deal of time reading and practicing your craft. Keep it up, Shauni!
This is a great metaphor for the person who entrapped you for a time. What great words you chose for this poem! It is obvious that you love the written word and that you spend a great deal of time reading and practicing your craft. Keep it up, Shauni!
4/21/2012 c1 Stonehartdreamer27
This is really good! I love how you compare this to a spider. Good work :)
~Stonehart
This is really good! I love how you compare this to a spider. Good work :)
~Stonehart
4/20/2012 c1 16Meadow Frost
Wonderful! Just wonderful! I really love the first part, it really flowed wonderfully, and the part,
Tempting trickles of morning dew
Compliment your look
Like a moth to the flame
In your venomous kiss I was hooked
vary powerful.
all together, a beautiful piece. :)
16Meadow FrostWonderful! Just wonderful! I really love the first part, it really flowed wonderfully, and the part,
Tempting trickles of morning dew
Compliment your look
Like a moth to the flame
In your venomous kiss I was hooked
vary powerful.
all together, a beautiful piece. :)
4/20/2012 c1 4I.Am.In.Progress
Wow, just... wow. I really enjoyed this! Well "enjoyed" might be the wrong word... the part where you wrote "Tempting trickles of morning dew/Compliment your look/Like a moth to the flame/In your venomous kiss I was hooked"absolutely just gave me the shivers. A very powerful poem... I look forward to reading the rest of your work!
4I.Am.In.ProgressWow, just... wow. I really enjoyed this! Well "enjoyed" might be the wrong word... the part where you wrote "Tempting trickles of morning dew/Compliment your look/Like a moth to the flame/In your venomous kiss I was hooked"absolutely just gave me the shivers. A very powerful poem... I look forward to reading the rest of your work!