for Mycelium5/16/2013 c1 japp
dnt like it
dnt like it
7/31/2012 c1 
58Inkspilled
One error near the end: "Other people, not known as scientists, had know about mushrooms for a long time."
Very amusing, by the second sentence, I had a clear idea of the narrative personality. I liked the him-her about the snail, there's plenty to learn from just this first chapter but it also fells like too educational at times, the way everything is explained directly to us. I also think I got lost through a bit of the POV shifts (snail, person, cat) that I had forgotten that Rachel was outside. Then she's eating inside with friends? Had me confused. Of course, that just goes along with my own tastes since I prefer very straightforward introductions.
I like the way every bit of nature is personified, the poppies and the animals, the fungi even. But I also feel like we spent a lot of time outside of Rachel's head. Nice first chapter, it really is very mushroom related. I'm excited to see what happens next.
58InkspilledOne error near the end: "Other people, not known as scientists, had know about mushrooms for a long time."
Very amusing, by the second sentence, I had a clear idea of the narrative personality. I liked the him-her about the snail, there's plenty to learn from just this first chapter but it also fells like too educational at times, the way everything is explained directly to us. I also think I got lost through a bit of the POV shifts (snail, person, cat) that I had forgotten that Rachel was outside. Then she's eating inside with friends? Had me confused. Of course, that just goes along with my own tastes since I prefer very straightforward introductions.
I like the way every bit of nature is personified, the poppies and the animals, the fungi even. But I also feel like we spent a lot of time outside of Rachel's head. Nice first chapter, it really is very mushroom related. I'm excited to see what happens next.