for Home Improvement5/29/2012 c1 Marla's Found
I got your story link from "The Bar" although I don't know exactly how that works but the premise of your story drew me in. Illness and a one shot at that.
I wasn't prepared for the ending because I thought he was dealing with a bad migraine at first but I kept reading feeling sorry for Chuck and then you hit this reader with some very visual writing!
Highlights:
Chuck lifted the cordless drill to his right temple and pulled the trigger. Pain screamed in his head and blood and flesh flew in a crazy spray across the work-surface. ***Egads - what a way to kill a headache!
***Then I loved your simplistic ending..."...After all, Hannah would be home any minute."
Nicely written.
I got your story link from "The Bar" although I don't know exactly how that works but the premise of your story drew me in. Illness and a one shot at that.
I wasn't prepared for the ending because I thought he was dealing with a bad migraine at first but I kept reading feeling sorry for Chuck and then you hit this reader with some very visual writing!
Highlights:
Chuck lifted the cordless drill to his right temple and pulled the trigger. Pain screamed in his head and blood and flesh flew in a crazy spray across the work-surface. ***Egads - what a way to kill a headache!
***Then I loved your simplistic ending..."...After all, Hannah would be home any minute."
Nicely written.
5/17/2012 c1 
13Isis 47
You're good at this. And I mean you're, like, REALLY good. This one wasn't as good as Independence Day, but pretty good. The only thing I didn't get was WHY Chuck was sick and why the ghosts wouldn't leave him alone, but I can say you need to post more of these.
. . . BTW, can you please review one of my horror stories? I need some attention drawn away from my humor; they took little to no time to drabble up. I would take them down, but it makes other people happy, so...
13Isis 47You're good at this. And I mean you're, like, REALLY good. This one wasn't as good as Independence Day, but pretty good. The only thing I didn't get was WHY Chuck was sick and why the ghosts wouldn't leave him alone, but I can say you need to post more of these.
. . . BTW, can you please review one of my horror stories? I need some attention drawn away from my humor; they took little to no time to drabble up. I would take them down, but it makes other people happy, so...
5/12/2012 c1 76The Autumn Queen
Now that was amazing. I would have preferred you use a different sort of break than stanza/line since tabs don't work, but that's your personal choice. Sometimes it's a tad difficult to tell the difference b/w paragraphs, but that could be my screen res.
76The Autumn QueenNow that was amazing. I would have preferred you use a different sort of break than stanza/line since tabs don't work, but that's your personal choice. Sometimes it's a tad difficult to tell the difference b/w paragraphs, but that could be my screen res.