for Quirks12/26/2012 c1 Rosie Jakklan
YOU HAD ME AT BEN HOWARD.
Well that's not fair I guess, seeing as BEN HOWARD IS AMAZING was at the notes at the end of the story. You actually had me at the summary. I adored this little taste of a couple, and the way you wrote it was enticing. I liked the "jeans balancing on the egde of his hips" because I didn't originally think of jeans as "balancing," but it fit. Lots of the phrasing went like that, where it seemed weird but fit. Like how your weird characters fit together.
But BEN HOWARD. AGH. Just. The fact that someone other than me knows his name, AGH. I got so excited.
Terrific job, you captured a lot with so few words. I don't know what you were getting at with the bolds and the italics though, I might have to read it again.
YOU HAD ME AT BEN HOWARD.
Well that's not fair I guess, seeing as BEN HOWARD IS AMAZING was at the notes at the end of the story. You actually had me at the summary. I adored this little taste of a couple, and the way you wrote it was enticing. I liked the "jeans balancing on the egde of his hips" because I didn't originally think of jeans as "balancing," but it fit. Lots of the phrasing went like that, where it seemed weird but fit. Like how your weird characters fit together.
But BEN HOWARD. AGH. Just. The fact that someone other than me knows his name, AGH. I got so excited.
Terrific job, you captured a lot with so few words. I don't know what you were getting at with the bolds and the italics though, I might have to read it again.
5/8/2012 c1 NationChild
Love the language you've used for this! Such descriptive phrases that don't take away from the main concept. I admire your ability to write such a piece with such random muses!
Love the language you've used for this! Such descriptive phrases that don't take away from the main concept. I admire your ability to write such a piece with such random muses!
5/7/2012 c1 
1Elizabeth K
Personally, I'm too distracted by the bold and underlined words. It took away from what you were trying to tell me.
But I did think it was a cute story.
1Elizabeth KPersonally, I'm too distracted by the bold and underlined words. It took away from what you were trying to tell me.
But I did think it was a cute story.