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32The Siege
OOH YES FINALLY!
The other day, when I got the email about chapter 10, I was like OMG YES EVERYTHING WILL FINALLY BEGIN but then...it wasn't there. :'(
So like you have nooo idea how excited I was to see another email for chapter 10 AND THIS TIME THE LINK ACTUALLY LED SOMEWHERE YESSS.
Anyways, this chapter did not disappoint. The wheels are beginning to turn! And yes, the title finally comes into play! Ahahaha.
I read through this really quickly cuz I really need to go do homework, so I'm not sure if there were any mistakes, but if there were then they're probably small insignificant errors. Nothing that impedes the reading of this chapter.
In keeping with your Hunger Games references, "May the odds be EVER in your (Jessica's?) favor." :P
32The SiegeOOH YES FINALLY!
The other day, when I got the email about chapter 10, I was like OMG YES EVERYTHING WILL FINALLY BEGIN but then...it wasn't there. :'(
So like you have nooo idea how excited I was to see another email for chapter 10 AND THIS TIME THE LINK ACTUALLY LED SOMEWHERE YESSS.
Anyways, this chapter did not disappoint. The wheels are beginning to turn! And yes, the title finally comes into play! Ahahaha.
I read through this really quickly cuz I really need to go do homework, so I'm not sure if there were any mistakes, but if there were then they're probably small insignificant errors. Nothing that impedes the reading of this chapter.
In keeping with your Hunger Games references, "May the odds be EVER in your (Jessica's?) favor." :P
10/29/2012 c10 1leavesfallingup
You make Jessica sound remarkable.
Now the title of your story finally begins to make sense. Her personality has been a little blank up to this point, but now she is beginning to show a quirky side.
But she's fooling herself if she believes that "befriend(ing)" a Beaumont is purely just a part of her scheme. The tea stain seems to imply something different entirely.
... then again, perhaps it is also a part of her ploy...
1leavesfallingupYou make Jessica sound remarkable.
Now the title of your story finally begins to make sense. Her personality has been a little blank up to this point, but now she is beginning to show a quirky side.
But she's fooling herself if she believes that "befriend(ing)" a Beaumont is purely just a part of her scheme. The tea stain seems to imply something different entirely.
... then again, perhaps it is also a part of her ploy...
10/28/2012 c10 7AMessofPickles
Oh dear god, I haven't read such a good story in a while :D Props to you my friend for having such a wonderfully thought out plot. I love the characters and how complex they are. Even Leah is more than the cold-hearted bi*** that she comes across as. I love her whole interaction with Dexter.
And of course, I can't forget the lovely Jessica and Cameron in all of this. They were wonderful and it's hilarious to see them both work through their beginning feelings for each other. The pace for their relationship is both realistic and amusing.
OH! And I'm curious as to see if Ralph will say anything about Jessica coming to the party with Dexter :P That might be interesting. I look forward to hearing more about him.
My favorite character in this chapter was easily the grandmother. She was hilarious and I hope we see more of her! Or at least some more genuinely nice characters.
I'm excited about her plans and I can feel that this is where the story "really" sort of starts. So far my suspects list only includes Karren. I can't say for sure that I think it's Harris mostly because we haven't seen ANYTHING about him, so right now I'm gonna rule him out (although that does make him mysterious/suspicious), and I'm gonna rule out Leah because no matter how rude and power-hungry she is I see no actual reason for her to kill Jessica's mother.
I mean she also knew at the time of the funeral that Jessica was getting a large sum of money so why kill her mother off? She was their maid, and I'm sure Leah would much rather have a fully functioning maid than a dead one...
Anyways, sorry for that terribly long review. You're story was just so GOOD and so easy to get distracted by that I ended up reading this instead of doing my huge amount of homework *glares at textbooks and binders* Good luck with the rest of the story! I can't wait for the other chapters!
Update update update! :D
7AMessofPicklesOh dear god, I haven't read such a good story in a while :D Props to you my friend for having such a wonderfully thought out plot. I love the characters and how complex they are. Even Leah is more than the cold-hearted bi*** that she comes across as. I love her whole interaction with Dexter.
And of course, I can't forget the lovely Jessica and Cameron in all of this. They were wonderful and it's hilarious to see them both work through their beginning feelings for each other. The pace for their relationship is both realistic and amusing.
OH! And I'm curious as to see if Ralph will say anything about Jessica coming to the party with Dexter :P That might be interesting. I look forward to hearing more about him.
My favorite character in this chapter was easily the grandmother. She was hilarious and I hope we see more of her! Or at least some more genuinely nice characters.
I'm excited about her plans and I can feel that this is where the story "really" sort of starts. So far my suspects list only includes Karren. I can't say for sure that I think it's Harris mostly because we haven't seen ANYTHING about him, so right now I'm gonna rule him out (although that does make him mysterious/suspicious), and I'm gonna rule out Leah because no matter how rude and power-hungry she is I see no actual reason for her to kill Jessica's mother.
I mean she also knew at the time of the funeral that Jessica was getting a large sum of money so why kill her mother off? She was their maid, and I'm sure Leah would much rather have a fully functioning maid than a dead one...
Anyways, sorry for that terribly long review. You're story was just so GOOD and so easy to get distracted by that I ended up reading this instead of doing my huge amount of homework *glares at textbooks and binders* Good luck with the rest of the story! I can't wait for the other chapters!
Update update update! :D
10/28/2012 c10 Amber Dawn12
That was awesome. Seriously. But now I feel bad for Dexter. Anyway, update FAST this time.
That was awesome. Seriously. But now I feel bad for Dexter. Anyway, update FAST this time.
10/28/2012 c10 1funnechick
Maybe I don't get this because I've never been in love myself, but how could Dexter have been in love with someone who is so different from his current love and long-time best friend? It just seems so contradictory. Leah just seems so evil...how could they have been/be compatible?
1funnechickMaybe I don't get this because I've never been in love myself, but how could Dexter have been in love with someone who is so different from his current love and long-time best friend? It just seems so contradictory. Leah just seems so evil...how could they have been/be compatible?
10/28/2012 c10 VoidVoidable
Yeah...the title suddenly makes sense. Btw a-j is TEN letters not nine as you have it. Great chapter!
Yeah...the title suddenly makes sense. Btw a-j is TEN letters not nine as you have it. Great chapter!
10/28/2012 c10 Guest
It's really good and update soon but maybe shorten dexters pov a little
But still amazing oh and question how old are u to be so talented?
It's really good and update soon but maybe shorten dexters pov a little
But still amazing oh and question how old are u to be so talented?
10/28/2012 c10 foreternity
:) havent read this story in such a long time! keep updating! :) i love the grandmother :) shes so nice unlike karen :P
:) havent read this story in such a long time! keep updating! :) i love the grandmother :) shes so nice unlike karen :P