for Forever You and Me9/12/2012 c1 
1k+Faithless Juliet
I really liked the voice that you used in this piece, I thought that you personalized it with a lot of moving phrases, and I also liked how you kept the same voice throughout the piece. It was very calm, and reflective.
I didn’t really care for using a comma after every line. This is what I would classify as ‘free verse’ and the only time you really have to have so many commas are with sonnets and things of that nature. I think that it interrupts the flow of the narration by having one at the end of every line – a few here and there are necessary, but beyond that it can weight a poem like this down.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietI really liked the voice that you used in this piece, I thought that you personalized it with a lot of moving phrases, and I also liked how you kept the same voice throughout the piece. It was very calm, and reflective.
I didn’t really care for using a comma after every line. This is what I would classify as ‘free verse’ and the only time you really have to have so many commas are with sonnets and things of that nature. I think that it interrupts the flow of the narration by having one at the end of every line – a few here and there are necessary, but beyond that it can weight a poem like this down.
Much love,
Juliet.