for Wanderlust9/16/2012 c1 
19Anihyr Moonstar
This is amazing. - Okay, well, the final stanza didn't appeal to me, since it didn't follow the pattern of the first three. But I *loved* the first three. It reminded me a tiny bit of Dr. Suess, but different and just...the words *rolled*. I haven't read any poetry recently that does that. It felted almost like a song, just minus the notes - all rhythm and alliteration and wordplay...
Color me impressed. :)
- Moonstar, Courtesy of the Review Game's Review Marathon - link in my profile
19Anihyr MoonstarThis is amazing. - Okay, well, the final stanza didn't appeal to me, since it didn't follow the pattern of the first three. But I *loved* the first three. It reminded me a tiny bit of Dr. Suess, but different and just...the words *rolled*. I haven't read any poetry recently that does that. It felted almost like a song, just minus the notes - all rhythm and alliteration and wordplay...
Color me impressed. :)
- Moonstar, Courtesy of the Review Game's Review Marathon - link in my profile
7/7/2012 c1 50The Moon Howls At The Wolf
Wow! The first two lines heavily remind me of reading Doctor Seuss as a child, and I mean that in the most complimentary way possible, as he has sold hundreads of thousands of books under that pen name. Love the use of intense vocabulary, as well as the abrupt end to the poem. They all fit together extraordinarily to create a myriad of emotions and confusion.
Keep Writing!
50The Moon Howls At The WolfWow! The first two lines heavily remind me of reading Doctor Seuss as a child, and I mean that in the most complimentary way possible, as he has sold hundreads of thousands of books under that pen name. Love the use of intense vocabulary, as well as the abrupt end to the poem. They all fit together extraordinarily to create a myriad of emotions and confusion.
Keep Writing!
5/26/2012 c1 6Victoria Best
Wow, I really like this! It's got a great idea behind it, what with the tongue-twisting and the different ways of pronouncing words all embedded within the rhyming scheme. I really enjoyed reading this, and it posed some interesting philosophical questions regarding human nature, for example the angst themes near the end of the poem such as "To discern and to coil in my stomach." It also offered interesting ideas such as daydreaming and the collision between reality and our thoughts, for example when the narrator asks where they would "Wander" if they "Wandered where they wondered." Perhaps it is trying to question whether daydreaming is fundamentally not that different from reality, and we would not want to go to the place of our daydreams anyway. Perhaps even if we did go to that place we would not "Wander any longer" and just leave, for it is not real, and although reality can be harsh and callous, it is real, and not just a figment of our imagination. This was an incredibly philosophical poem and so cleverly written. It is almost abstract in the way it combines the different rhyming schemes and melds them with interesting tongue-twisters. I really enjoyed reading this! It is one of the best poems I have read in a long time. You are a very talented writer :') Keep writing and following your dreams! :D
-Vicky x
6Victoria BestWow, I really like this! It's got a great idea behind it, what with the tongue-twisting and the different ways of pronouncing words all embedded within the rhyming scheme. I really enjoyed reading this, and it posed some interesting philosophical questions regarding human nature, for example the angst themes near the end of the poem such as "To discern and to coil in my stomach." It also offered interesting ideas such as daydreaming and the collision between reality and our thoughts, for example when the narrator asks where they would "Wander" if they "Wandered where they wondered." Perhaps it is trying to question whether daydreaming is fundamentally not that different from reality, and we would not want to go to the place of our daydreams anyway. Perhaps even if we did go to that place we would not "Wander any longer" and just leave, for it is not real, and although reality can be harsh and callous, it is real, and not just a figment of our imagination. This was an incredibly philosophical poem and so cleverly written. It is almost abstract in the way it combines the different rhyming schemes and melds them with interesting tongue-twisters. I really enjoyed reading this! It is one of the best poems I have read in a long time. You are a very talented writer :') Keep writing and following your dreams! :D
-Vicky x
5/18/2012 c1 76The Autumn Queen
Tonguetwister. Eergh, suck at those.
The first two lines seem somewhat disjointed from the rest of the piece though, if only because of that tonguetwisting effect. There's a place where the repetition would have perhaps worked better than the synonyms such as "ponder" in your second stanza.
"asunder under" - another tonguetwister.
"What right do you have
To write what you have?" - and another one. Good thing I'm not reading this aloud. :) Even though this is supposed to be angsty, I've got a grin on my face from the mind-boggling pronunciation variations.
76The Autumn QueenTonguetwister. Eergh, suck at those.
The first two lines seem somewhat disjointed from the rest of the piece though, if only because of that tonguetwisting effect. There's a place where the repetition would have perhaps worked better than the synonyms such as "ponder" in your second stanza.
"asunder under" - another tonguetwister.
"What right do you have
To write what you have?" - and another one. Good thing I'm not reading this aloud. :) Even though this is supposed to be angsty, I've got a grin on my face from the mind-boggling pronunciation variations.