for Fury5/18/2012 c1 
76The Autumn Queen
You've used the same cuss-word quite a bit, but somehow it helps with the rhythm. Don't dee that often. I wouldn't have been comfortable writing something like this, but I think you've done a good job. I think the line: "They made me sign my dreams away." falls a little flat though, compared to the rest.
76The Autumn QueenYou've used the same cuss-word quite a bit, but somehow it helps with the rhythm. Don't dee that often. I wouldn't have been comfortable writing something like this, but I think you've done a good job. I think the line: "They made me sign my dreams away." falls a little flat though, compared to the rest.