for Sincere Apology
155/21/2012 c1 creativitykiller
I know it's a poem, but I got bored after the first three lines. Even in poetry, I feel like there has to be something to pull you in, like a symbol. Either that or really short. The poem, to me, felt like pros split into verse (which I guess poetry is, but still). It was really litteral, and did not actually make me feel any emotion other than boredom (really, I'm not saying that to be mean). Why are you using a dialect? What does it add to the poem?
I know it's a poem, but I got bored after the first three lines. Even in poetry, I feel like there has to be something to pull you in, like a symbol. Either that or really short. The poem, to me, felt like pros split into verse (which I guess poetry is, but still). It was really litteral, and did not actually make me feel any emotion other than boredom (really, I'm not saying that to be mean). Why are you using a dialect? What does it add to the poem?