for Wolfy Instincts11/15/2017 c19 Acie
Are you kidding me? Come back and finish this tonight right now!
Are you kidding me? Come back and finish this tonight right now!
11/24/2014 c1 Guest
Hi! I'm Bailey! Let me start by saying I Iove your writing and your stories! You write in a very clear way, that's easy to flow along. You don't see that too often on here! Haha! At first, when I started Wolfy Instincts, I was a bit suspicious because I knew I had read that somewhere before! I looked through my favorites, and sure enough, there was Lupine Instincts! That concerned me because I thoght someone had stolen your story! That's when I noticed they were both written by you! Haha! I was going to message you, but i guess I don't have to! Keep up the amazing works and I can't wait to continue following you to see what you do in the future! Thank you!
Hi! I'm Bailey! Let me start by saying I Iove your writing and your stories! You write in a very clear way, that's easy to flow along. You don't see that too often on here! Haha! At first, when I started Wolfy Instincts, I was a bit suspicious because I knew I had read that somewhere before! I looked through my favorites, and sure enough, there was Lupine Instincts! That concerned me because I thoght someone had stolen your story! That's when I noticed they were both written by you! Haha! I was going to message you, but i guess I don't have to! Keep up the amazing works and I can't wait to continue following you to see what you do in the future! Thank you!
1/6/2014 c1 
1sharkprose
WHOA - this is way different than what I read the other day! Still really good though - strong written voice :)
I noticed you favor opening a dialog line with the voice of the speaker. Sometimes, for flow and tempo, you want to break that. If I may:
I glared at him as my wrist began to swell. "Your giant ass foot tripped me!"
Some lines are too short as well. Your second line is perfect - crisp, short sentences (some even partials), which makes her anger real. But if you do it all the time, it loses its ability to become a tool, and soon those lines you want to hit hard, fade in with the rest. Make sense?
If it was me, I'd do something like this: He stared down at me with a bored expression, AND I had a feeling I'd seen him before, but his face only teased my memory.
Other than that, I like it :)
1sharkproseWHOA - this is way different than what I read the other day! Still really good though - strong written voice :)
I noticed you favor opening a dialog line with the voice of the speaker. Sometimes, for flow and tempo, you want to break that. If I may:
I glared at him as my wrist began to swell. "Your giant ass foot tripped me!"
Some lines are too short as well. Your second line is perfect - crisp, short sentences (some even partials), which makes her anger real. But if you do it all the time, it loses its ability to become a tool, and soon those lines you want to hit hard, fade in with the rest. Make sense?
If it was me, I'd do something like this: He stared down at me with a bored expression, AND I had a feeling I'd seen him before, but his face only teased my memory.
Other than that, I like it :)
1/5/2014 c19 1neelamneedsnirvana
I absolutely love this story. I don't know if it's a lack of a beta on certain chapters but i think i've really seen your writing improve as the story progresses! I wanted a happy ending where no one died but i understand that because of Avery's nature that that woulsnt happen. I'm really happ you chose not to kill Darcy though. Speaking of whom, i think it's so funny that she turned out to be a he!
I hope you continue to write! Cheers :)
1neelamneedsnirvanaI absolutely love this story. I don't know if it's a lack of a beta on certain chapters but i think i've really seen your writing improve as the story progresses! I wanted a happy ending where no one died but i understand that because of Avery's nature that that woulsnt happen. I'm really happ you chose not to kill Darcy though. Speaking of whom, i think it's so funny that she turned out to be a he!
I hope you continue to write! Cheers :)
1/2/2014 c13 2OnyxBuddha
It's nice to see that an author cares so must about the reviews and dresses them individually, most people are just like "K. Thanks! Bye." ... And this story is growing on me. I like!
2OnyxBuddhaIt's nice to see that an author cares so must about the reviews and dresses them individually, most people are just like "K. Thanks! Bye." ... And this story is growing on me. I like!
12/28/2013 c19 Guest
hey great story update soon
hey great story update soon
12/26/2013 c17 thatgirlwiththeboy
This needs a sequel! Its practically asking for one!
Lovely story, I loved it!
This needs a sequel! Its practically asking for one!
Lovely story, I loved it!
12/26/2013 c11 Abbey
Hi there! I'm a new reader and I just want to say that I'm liking this story. Although, I can't help but notice a few grammatical errors in the past chapters. I just haven't pointed them out because I would quickly go to the next chapter, haha. What I noticed here is that Avery already told Jay some things about himself in chapter 9, like his favorite movie and the tattoo.
Anywho, I still find the plot intriguing. I'm going to read the rewrite of this afterwards.
Hi there! I'm a new reader and I just want to say that I'm liking this story. Although, I can't help but notice a few grammatical errors in the past chapters. I just haven't pointed them out because I would quickly go to the next chapter, haha. What I noticed here is that Avery already told Jay some things about himself in chapter 9, like his favorite movie and the tattoo.
Anywho, I still find the plot intriguing. I'm going to read the rewrite of this afterwards.
12/22/2013 c18 Dominique Diane
Oh God, your story...Fascinating! i'm crying like you have no idea, I felt so "lost" while Jay was kidnapped it made me feel so bad and sad about it and the fact that they were separated. But I also learned that (maybe?) Kenley was in love with Jay and then he was dead and I...Oh god, I'm such a sentimental person I pity myself...
Please update the epilogue, I beg you, I'm really really dying to know what's going to happen I might just start tearing my hair off!
Lots of Love!
Oh God, your story...Fascinating! i'm crying like you have no idea, I felt so "lost" while Jay was kidnapped it made me feel so bad and sad about it and the fact that they were separated. But I also learned that (maybe?) Kenley was in love with Jay and then he was dead and I...Oh god, I'm such a sentimental person I pity myself...
Please update the epilogue, I beg you, I'm really really dying to know what's going to happen I might just start tearing my hair off!
Lots of Love!