
11/21/2013 c10
1ellyrebecca2013
Now this is good. Werewolves always seem to be good reads and you have done an excellent job of it.

Now this is good. Werewolves always seem to be good reads and you have done an excellent job of it.
11/14/2013 c18
4R. Ficst
Eh, for the most part I like your story, but I don't care for the ending. Even though I am more of a happy-ending person, I do appreciate a tragic ending when done well. In this case, once they believe her pack wasn't abusing her, the reason for her prolonged imprisonment became too thin. And at the end they should have at least tried releasing her, to reunite with her mate and attempt to keep him from harming them. Because then there would be a chance they could escape obliteration, and if Avery didn't listen to her, she'd still have the "punishment" of knowing she brought their deaths. It just all got a little unbelievable, like you wanted to force a certain plot movement that didn't properly fit the characters and their motivations.

Eh, for the most part I like your story, but I don't care for the ending. Even though I am more of a happy-ending person, I do appreciate a tragic ending when done well. In this case, once they believe her pack wasn't abusing her, the reason for her prolonged imprisonment became too thin. And at the end they should have at least tried releasing her, to reunite with her mate and attempt to keep him from harming them. Because then there would be a chance they could escape obliteration, and if Avery didn't listen to her, she'd still have the "punishment" of knowing she brought their deaths. It just all got a little unbelievable, like you wanted to force a certain plot movement that didn't properly fit the characters and their motivations.
10/11/2013 c1 Lakotalady 12
So i love this story, but it doesn't sound over at all! when will part 2 be posted?
So i love this story, but it doesn't sound over at all! when will part 2 be posted?
8/11/2013 c18
1The New Aged Hippie
you bitch! you killed them all, maybe kinley deserved it a little but the others didn't! darn u!
storys good by the way. I am sucked in. I didn't mean to harm your feelings with the bitch stuff just frustraited with the reading like with all stories I love

you bitch! you killed them all, maybe kinley deserved it a little but the others didn't! darn u!
storys good by the way. I am sucked in. I didn't mean to harm your feelings with the bitch stuff just frustraited with the reading like with all stories I love
8/9/2013 c18
4Redcatie7
Man, it's been forever since I've read this! Sorry! I'm really excited to hear what happens next!

Man, it's been forever since I've read this! Sorry! I'm really excited to hear what happens next!
7/23/2013 c18 Think up a name
Hello hello! I'm new to this story and I just want to say that this story truly is amazing. I like the characters very much, just the fact that the small pack (minus Darcy) was killed shocked me a little...
Hello hello! I'm new to this story and I just want to say that this story truly is amazing. I like the characters very much, just the fact that the small pack (minus Darcy) was killed shocked me a little...
6/15/2013 c18 Guest
Ahh I loved this so much I'm glad she's home! I feel sorry for the others who died and now darcy who has to live its quite sad! But great chapter! - mydreamadventure.
Ahh I loved this so much I'm glad she's home! I feel sorry for the others who died and now darcy who has to live its quite sad! But great chapter! - mydreamadventure.
6/13/2013 c18 Guest
Well that escalated quickly ._.
Well that escalated quickly ._.
6/13/2013 c18 Guest
I bit of a morbid ending, kinda made me hate the main character T.T I don't understand how she could have possibly felt safe, happy and protected after letting Avery kill all those characters .
There are some things that are not adding up in your story. For example, when she went to the restaurant with Avery and she overheard him talking about finding something on his phone, what was that thing? The second thing that's not adding up was Avery's paranoia as if he thought she was going to disappear any second, but he refused to tell her what his problem was. It couldn't have been Kenley completely because he only kidnapped her when he thought Avery was abusing her due to the bruise on her face which came wayyyy later in the story.
Don't get me wrong, I liked the story a lot and I really enjoyed it but its left a lot of questions unanswered and the ending is sorta rushed.
I bit of a morbid ending, kinda made me hate the main character T.T I don't understand how she could have possibly felt safe, happy and protected after letting Avery kill all those characters .
There are some things that are not adding up in your story. For example, when she went to the restaurant with Avery and she overheard him talking about finding something on his phone, what was that thing? The second thing that's not adding up was Avery's paranoia as if he thought she was going to disappear any second, but he refused to tell her what his problem was. It couldn't have been Kenley completely because he only kidnapped her when he thought Avery was abusing her due to the bruise on her face which came wayyyy later in the story.
Don't get me wrong, I liked the story a lot and I really enjoyed it but its left a lot of questions unanswered and the ending is sorta rushed.
6/12/2013 c18 RandomCitizen
Well damn. Now I kinda hate your character. She was selfish and didn't listen when told pretty much anything. Not that you wrote her poorly or anything cause you point out her flaws pretty clearly. I just can't really support such a character's future happiness at all. It's like supporting Light Yagami from death note or Mako from Legend of Korra, just ain't quite deserving. Xp
Well...good luck making it all come together
Well damn. Now I kinda hate your character. She was selfish and didn't listen when told pretty much anything. Not that you wrote her poorly or anything cause you point out her flaws pretty clearly. I just can't really support such a character's future happiness at all. It's like supporting Light Yagami from death note or Mako from Legend of Korra, just ain't quite deserving. Xp
Well...good luck making it all come together