for Finding Paradise5/24/2020 c18 Josephine
Hi. I read Crescendo and I liked your writing style. I decided to check out your other work and from the synopsis, this one intrigued me the most and my goodness this is amazing. I like how dark this is and kind of reminds me of the 1995 movie Kids with little touch of Requiem For A Dream.
My only qualm is the lack of dialogues in this story. The chemistry is there but everybody seems to be lost in their own thoughts. Nevertheless, your writing is captivating. My heart breaks for Noah and Bobby. These boys are totally damaged. Tiara needs to be strong for these two. I don't think she's a total doormat but she isn't strong either. I'd like to see developmen in her character.
Please continue. I saw you haven't updated this story in almost 5 years. I'd like to read more because your writing captivates me.
Josephine.
Hi. I read Crescendo and I liked your writing style. I decided to check out your other work and from the synopsis, this one intrigued me the most and my goodness this is amazing. I like how dark this is and kind of reminds me of the 1995 movie Kids with little touch of Requiem For A Dream.
My only qualm is the lack of dialogues in this story. The chemistry is there but everybody seems to be lost in their own thoughts. Nevertheless, your writing is captivating. My heart breaks for Noah and Bobby. These boys are totally damaged. Tiara needs to be strong for these two. I don't think she's a total doormat but she isn't strong either. I'd like to see developmen in her character.
Please continue. I saw you haven't updated this story in almost 5 years. I'd like to read more because your writing captivates me.
Josephine.
11/1/2015 c18 Tahireen Ahmed
plzzzzzzzzzzz update Plz i begggggggg u plzzzz
plzzzzzzzzzzz update Plz i begggggggg u plzzzz
6/22/2015 c18 Tahireen Ahmed
please please update the next chap i cant wait to read it 3
please please update the next chap i cant wait to read it 3
1/31/2015 c18 ForeverDelirium
ForeverinDelirium here and for some reason fp is being hateful to me by logging me off (is it just me or do you guys have problems logging in too?) and I can't even type my fucking pen name (apparently there's an alphabet limit) To FP: don't even bother putting in guest's name if u just going to put limitation on alphabet counts asshat!)
I really missed this story and of course I missed you too! ;) I'm not even going to be one of those who pretend like I didn't miss this story but bother to read and just ignore reviewing then waiting forever for another update. I really hope you continue with this. I like the fact that you don't seem to give away everything about Noah's past, it's just makes everything about him mysterious but at the same time you're able to grasp little facts on what made him indulge in debauchery. I'm guessing someone must have had been abusing him...hmmm one of the parents maybe? I've got this feeling that the father had something to do with Noah's under-developed mental illness (lol!). Bobby is a real jerk here btw, I hope he'll chill off in the next chapter. Thanks for updating ;) and I can't wait for Adam & Eve the epilogue!
ForeverinDelirium
ForeverinDelirium here and for some reason fp is being hateful to me by logging me off (is it just me or do you guys have problems logging in too?) and I can't even type my fucking pen name (apparently there's an alphabet limit) To FP: don't even bother putting in guest's name if u just going to put limitation on alphabet counts asshat!)
I really missed this story and of course I missed you too! ;) I'm not even going to be one of those who pretend like I didn't miss this story but bother to read and just ignore reviewing then waiting forever for another update. I really hope you continue with this. I like the fact that you don't seem to give away everything about Noah's past, it's just makes everything about him mysterious but at the same time you're able to grasp little facts on what made him indulge in debauchery. I'm guessing someone must have had been abusing him...hmmm one of the parents maybe? I've got this feeling that the father had something to do with Noah's under-developed mental illness (lol!). Bobby is a real jerk here btw, I hope he'll chill off in the next chapter. Thanks for updating ;) and I can't wait for Adam & Eve the epilogue!
ForeverinDelirium
1/25/2015 c18 atlalok33
oh my, the boys are going through such hard times... will tiara fix them both? the last part of this chapter kept me hanging...argh! i can't wait for the next chapter! what is noah going to do to tiara? and i can't wait for the epilogue for AE!
oh my, the boys are going through such hard times... will tiara fix them both? the last part of this chapter kept me hanging...argh! i can't wait for the next chapter! what is noah going to do to tiara? and i can't wait for the epilogue for AE!
1/26/2015 c18 darkouthere
boy was i glad to get an email telling me you updated!
it's been a little while since i've read this story, but it looks like it's getting darker (ha). i still have a bit of a hard time believing these kids are just in high school! (well except that bobby seems to have a lot of homework). so far, things with noah are mysterious...i still don't have a complete grasp on his character yet, but it just might be because i don't relate to him much (not that i can relate to most of the characters anyway, and thank goodness for that) or that i can't understand why he does what he does given the reasons that he does them (terrible parents/pressure). same goes for bobby now as well...both these kids actually have a lot in common...i can only hope they learn to help themselves.
as far tiara, i'm glad to see that you seem to be writing her as a stronger character. i like the way she interacted with bobby...she held strong and wasn't overpowered like she is when she's with noah, you know what i mean? like she's in control and has agency of her own...that's the kind of female character i like!
anyway, i'm glad you're back and take as much time as you need! good writing takes time after all and i can't wait to read the next chapter!
boy was i glad to get an email telling me you updated!
it's been a little while since i've read this story, but it looks like it's getting darker (ha). i still have a bit of a hard time believing these kids are just in high school! (well except that bobby seems to have a lot of homework). so far, things with noah are mysterious...i still don't have a complete grasp on his character yet, but it just might be because i don't relate to him much (not that i can relate to most of the characters anyway, and thank goodness for that) or that i can't understand why he does what he does given the reasons that he does them (terrible parents/pressure). same goes for bobby now as well...both these kids actually have a lot in common...i can only hope they learn to help themselves.
as far tiara, i'm glad to see that you seem to be writing her as a stronger character. i like the way she interacted with bobby...she held strong and wasn't overpowered like she is when she's with noah, you know what i mean? like she's in control and has agency of her own...that's the kind of female character i like!
anyway, i'm glad you're back and take as much time as you need! good writing takes time after all and i can't wait to read the next chapter!
1/26/2015 c18 
3sunkissed-skin
Hey no worries (: I don't know others but I totally support you not giving up on this story and may I say how stoked I was getting an update! I really missed everyone in here hahaa
The story Noah wrote is somewhat tragic and heart-rending. It sort of gives us a glimpse on him being real and not the ass we knew. The first scene of this chapter with blood pouring out of his nose is sort of wretched too. Is it a disease? And woman pleaseeeee you leave us hanging again! I reviewed so u better update this soon xP
Noah reads The 120 Days of Sodom? Well I watched the movie but not like I could finish it. It was too degrading, disgusting and disturbing.
3sunkissed-skinHey no worries (: I don't know others but I totally support you not giving up on this story and may I say how stoked I was getting an update! I really missed everyone in here hahaa
The story Noah wrote is somewhat tragic and heart-rending. It sort of gives us a glimpse on him being real and not the ass we knew. The first scene of this chapter with blood pouring out of his nose is sort of wretched too. Is it a disease? And woman pleaseeeee you leave us hanging again! I reviewed so u better update this soon xP
Noah reads The 120 Days of Sodom? Well I watched the movie but not like I could finish it. It was too degrading, disgusting and disturbing.
1/25/2015 c18 zooey will
Yeay! An update! I hope you still remember me *laughs* Bobby is really depressed but what happened between him and Jenna at ben's party? Gosh i hope jenna won't corrupt him...i mean the boy is almost on the verge of killing himself and i don't really want him to end up like that. Now that I read the prologue i have this notion that noah is hiding something right? Maybe traumatic past. I kinda figured he was abused when he was little. That's devastating :/ and i like that he's starting to show the other side of him not the usual manipulative kind we've always known.
'I try to chase after you, but I can't reach you
So I use the scarf you gave me, but it got caught around my neck
And I choke to death
This journey of finding myself is the actual 9th circle of Hell.' - This is beautiful, but also depressing. Oh Noah...
Yeay! An update! I hope you still remember me *laughs* Bobby is really depressed but what happened between him and Jenna at ben's party? Gosh i hope jenna won't corrupt him...i mean the boy is almost on the verge of killing himself and i don't really want him to end up like that. Now that I read the prologue i have this notion that noah is hiding something right? Maybe traumatic past. I kinda figured he was abused when he was little. That's devastating :/ and i like that he's starting to show the other side of him not the usual manipulative kind we've always known.
'I try to chase after you, but I can't reach you
So I use the scarf you gave me, but it got caught around my neck
And I choke to death
This journey of finding myself is the actual 9th circle of Hell.' - This is beautiful, but also depressing. Oh Noah...
1/25/2015 c18 True Talker
I found this interesting to read and am curious to learn what happens next.
I found this interesting to read and am curious to learn what happens next.
1/19/2015 c10 Guest
'He thought he was dreaming sweet innocent dreams, only to find himself waking up in the middle of nightmare.'
this sentence gives me goosebumps
'He thought he was dreaming sweet innocent dreams, only to find himself waking up in the middle of nightmare.'
this sentence gives me goosebumps
1/19/2015 c16 random reader
wow what a story! everyone here is so messed up! i like how dark yet interesting this story is. it reminds me of Skins.
i think jenna is an interesting character. she's an evil bitch but she seems like she can bring more to the story.
i like both noah and bobby. bad boys, one corrupted the other has heart of gold. they can be quite sadistic and their drug habit and sexual indulgence disgust me at some point but there's just something about them that makes me...hmmm...i dont know how to put it...symphatize? haha i dont know. i hope you start bringing noah more. i want to know more about the boy behind the evil scheming mask.
wow what a story! everyone here is so messed up! i like how dark yet interesting this story is. it reminds me of Skins.
i think jenna is an interesting character. she's an evil bitch but she seems like she can bring more to the story.
i like both noah and bobby. bad boys, one corrupted the other has heart of gold. they can be quite sadistic and their drug habit and sexual indulgence disgust me at some point but there's just something about them that makes me...hmmm...i dont know how to put it...symphatize? haha i dont know. i hope you start bringing noah more. i want to know more about the boy behind the evil scheming mask.