for The Hot, new guy9/11/2012 c2 
4whatthegreencarrot
[Casey I thought to myself, she seemed like a hard-ass chick but it was obvious that she was falling for me, and by obvious I mean very obvious I think she had even salivated while staring at me, but hey who can blame her?] That is a run-on sentence, I think. There should be a comma after "Casey" and a semicolon after "myself," not a comma. Comma after "chick." Period after "obvious," and the "I think she even salivated" part should be a different sentence. "But hey who can blame her?" should've been "But hey, who could blame her?" instead.
Toodles—
-whatthegreencarrot
4whatthegreencarrot[Casey I thought to myself, she seemed like a hard-ass chick but it was obvious that she was falling for me, and by obvious I mean very obvious I think she had even salivated while staring at me, but hey who can blame her?] That is a run-on sentence, I think. There should be a comma after "Casey" and a semicolon after "myself," not a comma. Comma after "chick." Period after "obvious," and the "I think she even salivated" part should be a different sentence. "But hey who can blame her?" should've been "But hey, who could blame her?" instead.
Toodles—
-whatthegreencarrot
9/3/2012 c1 E.Gaze
Hey! You wanted me to read this and I have to say I'm impressed! I really like the narration. Casey is very charismatic and it makes the story very original and interesting, it intrigues you from the start. The dialogue reminds me of something out of a movie, well done!
And congrats on finishing this book too! :)
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Hey! You wanted me to read this and I have to say I'm impressed! I really like the narration. Casey is very charismatic and it makes the story very original and interesting, it intrigues you from the start. The dialogue reminds me of something out of a movie, well done!
And congrats on finishing this book too! :)
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8/28/2012 c1 2Michelle Valentine
This is so darn cute! The dialog is GREAT! I love the banter between your main character and Conner. I can definitely see myself digging Conner as a love interest!
KEEP WRITING! :D
2Michelle ValentineThis is so darn cute! The dialog is GREAT! I love the banter between your main character and Conner. I can definitely see myself digging Conner as a love interest!
KEEP WRITING! :D
8/26/2012 c22 Guest
Hello!
Hello!
8/24/2012 c22 skye real
Aawww finished already? I really enjoyed that. Please keep me posted on your new stories :-)
Aawww finished already? I really enjoyed that. Please keep me posted on your new stories :-)
8/23/2012 c22 Doc Olympia
I just read this fit, and I loved it. Sure, Mandy, Connor, and Casey had their bitchy/bastardy moments, but other than that, this was great. It kinda reminded me of those weird drama shows on TV all the time. :)
I just read this fit, and I loved it. Sure, Mandy, Connor, and Casey had their bitchy/bastardy moments, but other than that, this was great. It kinda reminded me of those weird drama shows on TV all the time. :)
8/23/2012 c22 30HopelessRomantic97
Hi!:P just read the last chapter of The Hot, new Guy. Can't believe its finished! Can't wait for what's coming up next:)
30HopelessRomantic97Hi!:P just read the last chapter of The Hot, new Guy. Can't believe its finished! Can't wait for what's coming up next:)
8/23/2012 c22 4colbyjackchz
Wonderful job! Loved the ending, the story, the characters, EVERYTHING! Congratulations on finishing it and I look forward to more of your stories :)
4colbyjackchzWonderful job! Loved the ending, the story, the characters, EVERYTHING! Congratulations on finishing it and I look forward to more of your stories :)
8/23/2012 c22 5journeyoflife
2;pwekbdl sc,.
is that good enough?
hahah but no, seriously yay! it's a very lovely ending! and of course i'm glad it ended the way it was supposed to!
5journeyoflife2;pwekbdl sc,.
is that good enough?
hahah but no, seriously yay! it's a very lovely ending! and of course i'm glad it ended the way it was supposed to!