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1/25/2013 c4 6Ophelia Schmit
This is so cute! Love it, it shows so much happiness in twelve stanzas.

1/18/2013 c6 3Broken but Beautiful
That was really good!
9/19/2012 c5 Broken but Beautiful
That was really pretty! Good job!
9/8/2012 c2 97rust phoenix
I really like the image of memories floating inside people.
8/8/2012 c4 22my poor toaster
I've decided that I like you.
8/7/2012 c4 3Broken but Beautiful
Oh my gosh! This is exactly how I felt watching the fireworks with my best friend on the 4th of July! I loved this poem!
8/7/2012 c3 Broken but Beautiful
So true! Fantastic!
8/7/2012 c2 Broken but Beautiful
:) Great poem!
8/7/2012 c1 Broken but Beautiful
Beautiful! I like it! Good job!
6/29/2012 c4 4Water Balloon
Ahhhhhh! That was a reeeeeeaaaalllllyyy good poem! I love it! I like how the lines rhyme. My favorite lines, for some reason, are the last two and the ones about how there was nothing that a hug couldn't mend. Please keep adding!
6/10/2012 c3 this wild abyss
[From the Review Marathon, link in profile]

Very interesting.

For me, this poem felt like it was written in a list style because of the way you had so many full-stops at the end of your lines. I didn't like that because it made the rhythm of the piece jarring. There was no real flow here. Not to say, though, that all poems have to have a definite structure of flow, but I'm not sure this bam bam bam style worked well for you here.

The topic of this poem, like I said, is very interesting. I like that it's strongly worded because it shows you have a passion for the topic. You also raise some points that are worth thinking about.
6/10/2012 c2 this wild abyss
[From the Review Marathon, link in profile]

I like the image of memories floating around inside of us because it's unique and makes me think. It's an interesting idea, and gives the impression that memories are detached from us, sort of separate. I definitely haven't seen it put quite like that before, so thanks for that! I do think, though, that some of your imagers were a little stale and/or overdone, which then lessened the impact of the poem's message. The first lines, "Happy memories are bits of joy" for instance, sounds a little childish to my ears.
6/10/2012 c1 this wild abyss
[From the Review Marathon, link in profile]

I like the way you've layered this girl's personality because it shows that she has depth and is fairly rounded. I also like the way you start each stanza off the same because it gives the poem a sense of continuity and wholeness.

"And so are everyone else." [Edit: "are" should be "is"]

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