for Hold My Hand6/18/2012 c1 
59builtonbones
The concept interests me. The beginning of the chapter was really good, but towards the end your writing got a bit confusing. The way you described the road didn't makes lit I sense. There wasn't too much information in this chapter but it makes sense since its introducing us to the story. The short length made me want to know more about what's going to happen. I think this was cute so far though. (:
59builtonbonesThe concept interests me. The beginning of the chapter was really good, but towards the end your writing got a bit confusing. The way you described the road didn't makes lit I sense. There wasn't too much information in this chapter but it makes sense since its introducing us to the story. The short length made me want to know more about what's going to happen. I think this was cute so far though. (: