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13creativesmarts
This was amazing; I loved it! It made me laugh constantly, which is always good, and these two are just so cute together! I also enjoyed being inside Ivan's head, it was entertaining:)
Overall, great job, and this is definitely going on my favorites:)
13creativesmartsThis was amazing; I loved it! It made me laugh constantly, which is always good, and these two are just so cute together! I also enjoyed being inside Ivan's head, it was entertaining:)
Overall, great job, and this is definitely going on my favorites:)
3/9/2013 c14 1falling-into-fate
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY EFFING GOD THAT WAS ADORABLE AND AMAZING AND HILARIOUS AND asddfghj. I loved it. Omfg. So adorable. Favoriting for sure!
1falling-into-fateOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY EFFING GOD THAT WAS ADORABLE AND AMAZING AND HILARIOUS AND asddfghj. I loved it. Omfg. So adorable. Favoriting for sure!
2/16/2013 c14 4GrangerDanger333
OHMYGODS. The ending was just...! I totally cringed to death at the complete cheese of it! And then came back to life to say AAWWWWWWWWW!
Briiliant story! A road trip -wow! So much cuteness and drama and aawww :) Really well written too. Puh-lease write some more long stories? This was super, and although it did kind of feel like the ending crept up on you, it still fitted well and made sense and everything. An epilogue would be AWESOME.. if you can manage that :D And maybe it would bring the story to more of an end. But if you decide not to, that's fine too. :)
4GrangerDanger333OHMYGODS. The ending was just...! I totally cringed to death at the complete cheese of it! And then came back to life to say AAWWWWWWWWW!
Briiliant story! A road trip -wow! So much cuteness and drama and aawww :) Really well written too. Puh-lease write some more long stories? This was super, and although it did kind of feel like the ending crept up on you, it still fitted well and made sense and everything. An epilogue would be AWESOME.. if you can manage that :D And maybe it would bring the story to more of an end. But if you decide not to, that's fine too. :)
1/18/2013 c14 Guest
Fantastic! I loved it. Please write some more stories. Great writing.
Fantastic! I loved it. Please write some more stories. Great writing.
12/25/2012 c14 2ohsocyanide
So, I finally sat the fuck down, sucked it up, and read the end.
It was, of course, fabulous. I love how you ended it; I feel like you tied everything together really well and we had nice closure. So, yeah.
I personally think this is fine as is: it almost gives the reader room to choose what happens with Ivan and Emerson later on, which is always nice and rather refreshing, but an epilogue would be cool, if you wanted that, too.
Merry Christmas!
ohsocyanide.
2ohsocyanideSo, I finally sat the fuck down, sucked it up, and read the end.
It was, of course, fabulous. I love how you ended it; I feel like you tied everything together really well and we had nice closure. So, yeah.
I personally think this is fine as is: it almost gives the reader room to choose what happens with Ivan and Emerson later on, which is always nice and rather refreshing, but an epilogue would be cool, if you wanted that, too.
Merry Christmas!
ohsocyanide.
12/24/2012 c14 TheGhostChild
This was so absolutely beautiful in a funny and charming c:
Favorite line:
"Let's not think about happily ever after. Let's just think about happily right now."
Definitely c:
This was so absolutely beautiful in a funny and charming c:
Favorite line:
"Let's not think about happily ever after. Let's just think about happily right now."
Definitely c:
12/20/2012 c14 1KiyoshiTanaka
Soooo... I just wanted to know that I really enjoyed this. I'm glad I took the time to read it. I love how Ivan is a complete dick but you can't just hate him completely. Nico is adorable. Emerson is... I don't know if I could put up with someone like Ivan as well as Emerson does.
The ending: I love the ending. It isn't too dramatic but it doesn't leave the story feeling unresolved either, which is very good. (I struggle with endings as well, so I know how you feel.) And no, I don't think you need an epilogue. I like it as it is. (I'm going to follow the story anyway, just in case you do decide to add one, though...)
Anyway, great job, keep writing!
Kiyoshi'sGirl64 and Kiyoshi
1KiyoshiTanakaSoooo... I just wanted to know that I really enjoyed this. I'm glad I took the time to read it. I love how Ivan is a complete dick but you can't just hate him completely. Nico is adorable. Emerson is... I don't know if I could put up with someone like Ivan as well as Emerson does.
The ending: I love the ending. It isn't too dramatic but it doesn't leave the story feeling unresolved either, which is very good. (I struggle with endings as well, so I know how you feel.) And no, I don't think you need an epilogue. I like it as it is. (I'm going to follow the story anyway, just in case you do decide to add one, though...)
Anyway, great job, keep writing!
Kiyoshi'sGirl64 and Kiyoshi
12/20/2012 c14 semantics
Even with the cliche drunk night and best friends to boyfriends, you pulled off this story with so much class. Absolutely classic. It was very light hearted and humorous. They still have not yet visited Ivan's family, haha. And all the hypothetically dialogue allowed the story to not be too mushy and let Ivan and Em stay to their character. I'm glad that Ivan doesn't just mutter nonsense like, I love you... the several mentions of him being controlled by his crotch tells us so much about Ivan's non-commital stance on relatipnships. Beautifully written and great job! I hope to read a little epilogue anout their time back in college? How would that change everything for them now?
Once again, great job!
Even with the cliche drunk night and best friends to boyfriends, you pulled off this story with so much class. Absolutely classic. It was very light hearted and humorous. They still have not yet visited Ivan's family, haha. And all the hypothetically dialogue allowed the story to not be too mushy and let Ivan and Em stay to their character. I'm glad that Ivan doesn't just mutter nonsense like, I love you... the several mentions of him being controlled by his crotch tells us so much about Ivan's non-commital stance on relatipnships. Beautifully written and great job! I hope to read a little epilogue anout their time back in college? How would that change everything for them now?
Once again, great job!
12/20/2012 c7 semantics
The bar scene was hot. and Ivan is always trying to prove he is straight by talking about his latest girl conquest... can't wait to read future chapters ;)
Nico is also very cute. You managed to include him in seamlessly, as characters that appear later in the story always seem to be a third wheel preventing the two main characters from getting together, but you made Nico help these two BFFs. Without Nico, I can only imagine how boring their trip would be... they probably would have gone the whole trip without any sexual tension. Love this story!
The bar scene was hot. and Ivan is always trying to prove he is straight by talking about his latest girl conquest... can't wait to read future chapters ;)
Nico is also very cute. You managed to include him in seamlessly, as characters that appear later in the story always seem to be a third wheel preventing the two main characters from getting together, but you made Nico help these two BFFs. Without Nico, I can only imagine how boring their trip would be... they probably would have gone the whole trip without any sexual tension. Love this story!
12/20/2012 c4 semantics
Does Ivan end up with Nico...? You seriously have me guessing because it does seem quite possible... you are an amazing story teller! I really love your writing style. Run on sentences match this story and captures Ivan's presence exactly.
Does Ivan end up with Nico...? You seriously have me guessing because it does seem quite possible... you are an amazing story teller! I really love your writing style. Run on sentences match this story and captures Ivan's presence exactly.
12/19/2012 c3 semantics
This is way too cute! Is Nico gay? I think I'll read more to find out... hehe, Ivan is very, very adorable.
This is way too cute! Is Nico gay? I think I'll read more to find out... hehe, Ivan is very, very adorable.
12/19/2012 c2 semantics
Soooo cute! I love Ivan! and Emerson! The fact that Ivan is so chill with whatever, and the fact that Emerson is gay- that'll make for an interesting adventure ;-) I love your style of writing... very personable. Ivan's character really shines through. Still only on the second chapter, but I look forward to reading more.
Soooo cute! I love Ivan! and Emerson! The fact that Ivan is so chill with whatever, and the fact that Emerson is gay- that'll make for an interesting adventure ;-) I love your style of writing... very personable. Ivan's character really shines through. Still only on the second chapter, but I look forward to reading more.
12/9/2012 c14 Specificity
You... you... YOU! "...but things can't last forever right?" I ACTUALLY GASPED AT THAT. NO. NO WAY. YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED TO BREAK THEM UP BECAUSE I WILL FIND YOU AND MAYBE DO BODILY HARM TO YOU. Or make you write them back together for my sanity. Because that's a thing, you know. I would totally do that.
That aside, congratulations on finishing you first chaptered story! That's huge! You should feel so proud of yourself! Especially since it was a really good chaptered story! Awwh. I'm going to miss this story.
Hokay, so. Things I liked: how the time setting was so constricted but still felt like it was natural without a limitation, how the time-line of the story actually fit within the set period at the beginning, the characters, the interaction, the way you were able to convey emotions and thoughts from different characters' points of view and how arguments were realistic and valid points were raised. I also loved Ivan's childish-as-hell-but-not-5-years-old personality. He was vair realistic, so props on that. At first, I was really unsure of Nico, but then he turned into something that really fit with the story and didn't bother me. For a while, I was worried that Ivan would end up with Nico (because I always seem to root for the wrong character, and Emerson... I mean, hello, Emerson), but that didn't happen.
Things I noticed could be improved on: punctuation, punctuation, punctuation. There were quite a few areas where the punctuation was missing or could have been implemented differently to create a different setting or tone. I know a lot of people don't really pay attention to the punctuation and that they think it doesn't really improve a story, but it really, really does. There were a couple of instances where you switched between conjugated verbs or adjectives, as well as conjoined words, which, in some cases, isn't something you can necessarily avoid, but felt weird when reading it: I kept feeling that a sentence was switching between casually colloquial and formal when you switched between the two, which made it hard to read in some places.
Other than those points, there wasn't much to point out without going back and reading it from start to finish again. I really enjoyed the story, and congratulations again! I'm so glad that I got to see this from pretty much the start to the end.
Thanks for the read!
You... you... YOU! "...but things can't last forever right?" I ACTUALLY GASPED AT THAT. NO. NO WAY. YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED TO BREAK THEM UP BECAUSE I WILL FIND YOU AND MAYBE DO BODILY HARM TO YOU. Or make you write them back together for my sanity. Because that's a thing, you know. I would totally do that.
That aside, congratulations on finishing you first chaptered story! That's huge! You should feel so proud of yourself! Especially since it was a really good chaptered story! Awwh. I'm going to miss this story.
Hokay, so. Things I liked: how the time setting was so constricted but still felt like it was natural without a limitation, how the time-line of the story actually fit within the set period at the beginning, the characters, the interaction, the way you were able to convey emotions and thoughts from different characters' points of view and how arguments were realistic and valid points were raised. I also loved Ivan's childish-as-hell-but-not-5-years-old personality. He was vair realistic, so props on that. At first, I was really unsure of Nico, but then he turned into something that really fit with the story and didn't bother me. For a while, I was worried that Ivan would end up with Nico (because I always seem to root for the wrong character, and Emerson... I mean, hello, Emerson), but that didn't happen.
Things I noticed could be improved on: punctuation, punctuation, punctuation. There were quite a few areas where the punctuation was missing or could have been implemented differently to create a different setting or tone. I know a lot of people don't really pay attention to the punctuation and that they think it doesn't really improve a story, but it really, really does. There were a couple of instances where you switched between conjugated verbs or adjectives, as well as conjoined words, which, in some cases, isn't something you can necessarily avoid, but felt weird when reading it: I kept feeling that a sentence was switching between casually colloquial and formal when you switched between the two, which made it hard to read in some places.
Other than those points, there wasn't much to point out without going back and reading it from start to finish again. I really enjoyed the story, and congratulations again! I'm so glad that I got to see this from pretty much the start to the end.
Thanks for the read!
12/4/2012 c14 4ImmanenceEnsured
The whole of this last chapter was just so incredibly entertaining. Just, their conversations, Ivan's flow of mind, it's all sweet and perfect in a way. This was the ideal ending of the story, and I'm so happy you managed to wrap it up this nicely.
Job well done:)
4ImmanenceEnsuredThe whole of this last chapter was just so incredibly entertaining. Just, their conversations, Ivan's flow of mind, it's all sweet and perfect in a way. This was the ideal ending of the story, and I'm so happy you managed to wrap it up this nicely.
Job well done:)