11/25/2012 c14 13Fruits basket lover '00
I finished the chapter all, "Oh my God!" Then when i saw the " The End" i was like, "OH MY GOD!" And i completely flipped out. I LOVED this, and am definately reccommending this. AMAZING job. Hope you continue with more!

Van

11/23/2012 c14 2GreenGrass1
Oh, there you go, Ivan. Finally you can (hypothetically) say how you feel.

Anyway, great ending. Love this story.

11/22/2012 c14 5IThinkIJustFoundHeaven
So good. I say no epilogue. If anything, do a sequel or Maine a companion book for Nico's story. But I think those are perfect words to close a book on.

11/22/2012 c14 2heyitsstupidme
Wow, I didn't expect this to be the last chapter, but I like the way you ended it. You're right, things can't last forever and this story was about their road trip and how they went from being best friends to being boyfriends. I loved this story. It was funny, heartwarming and you just write amazing dialogues. You gave the characters their own personality and behaviour and I enjoyed reading every single chapter. A epilogue or an one-shot would be great, because I'm curious how Ivan is at being Emerson's boyfriend, but it's perfectly fine the way it is.
How was the musical? Did everything go fine?

11/22/2012 c14 xfffxfxfx
So good! Wonderful. I love the strong undercurrent of sadness in this chapter that gets pushed into that wonderful lovely lovey-dovery at the end.

I don't know what else to say. I've completely enjoyed this and I want you to write something else too. I'm sure you'll progress even further as a writer; and even if there's no discernible improvement, I'll be supportive all the way.

Yes... write on, my little one, write on.

11/21/2012 c14 6Collins-A
Absolutely perfect. There is nothing about this story I would want you to change. I really hope you dont eventually take this down because I want to read and reread this story anytime.
I can't believe it's done :'( but really, there wasn't a more perfect time to end this story. Perhaps a sequel? That would be so amazing.

11/11/2012 c11 8Happy Hippie
Hey dear,

I soooooo wanted to finish all the way through chapter 13 before I had to work my three twelve hour nights in a row and not be able to get anything done until next weekend but...that didn't happen. Sad face. But I got to chapter 11 so I was like, I'll just review again, so that way I won't feel so guilty. Anyway, on to real things - I really like this. It's quite silly which is very refreshing. Don't get me wrong, I love my hardcore drama but sometimes it does get tiring so this is a nice change for me. Also it seems like you tend to write about a lot of the same situations that I do so it's relatable in that way (btw, this thing seems to think relatable isn't a word because it's all underlined in red but I just went and googled it and I swear it really is). Also, quit freaking out in your author's notes, there's no reason to. The pacing is fine, your chapters are short enough that as long as each one contains one specific event that at least somewhat drives the plot I don't think you have anything to worry about.

My one piece of advice, because I feel like this is a total waste of your time if I don't at least attempt some sort of critique, would be don't get so caught up in making characters quirky that the person underneath it gets lost. I feel like Nico's gotten dangerously close to that a couple times. There's nothing wrong with fun characters, and if it's a really minor one that isn't seen very often and only serves for comic relief or something then it doesn't bother me, but just be careful of letting a character become a plot point. Round it out is what I'm saying, show us more than just one side of everyone, or at least of the important people (SO THAT WE KNOW THEY'RE NOT ALIENS!) But that being said, I still really like this, and I'm going to read chapters 12 and 13...on Thursday. Or Friday. But soon.

XOXO

Jessie