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7/29/2013 c1 6Andene
Very moving piece...I feel a little bit upset having read this. I love how although the story is so short, you've developed the emotions around it so well. I like the way you describe the shoes passing the main character by as mice, and how they view the homeless as some lesser beings. and ignore their plight. It's very true in that sense how some of us view others in this world.

The last three lines really had me. I was kind of hoping that there would be good Samaritan to stop the character from jumping, but alas. I suppose then they wouldn't have felt free at the end.

I really liked your work! Hope you will post more!
7/9/2012 c1 131Mylilblackpen
Well...I am speechless. I think this is a great perspective on such a sad and touching subject; you portrayed it very well and I think that is what makes it more powerful because it's not to over the top. I like the last line, it brought a tear to my eye and I think if a piece can do that then it is is definitely worth a favourite.

Take Care,
Mylilblackpen :)
7/2/2012 c1 4RainEpelt
What is it? I'm lost.
6/30/2012 c1 7RuciliaChrisSpellson
Awesome! Short and Dramatic with a touch of suspense.

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