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1/26/2013 c1 21BrandNew
This is straightforward and powerful, I like it. It's a simple three lines, yet it really makes you think. Why can't this person breathe? What's wrong with them? Stuff like that, so yeah, great job!
1/12/2013 c1 216ygg
Very straightforward, which enhances its powerful emotions. Well done!
12/28/2012 c1 6Ophelia Schmit
Iambic meter is perfect in this poem! Great first haiku!

Hermie
7/20/2012 c1 7Saki Kikkio Ohayashi
Catchy
7/18/2012 c1 filledwithsilence
lovely. :)
7/16/2012 c1 6CrazyLittleGermanMiss
short sweet and to he point.
7/10/2012 c1 16Meadow Frost
I like well written haiku's because they are so powerful in just a few lines.
Loved it.
7/9/2012 c1 6catching.my.breath
Pretty nice!
7/8/2012 c1 4Aizawa Minami
Very good haiku, not bad for a first Japanese poem, keep up the good work!
7/5/2012 c1 16Spring Storm
Simple but powerful. Good job!
7/2/2012 c1 7Rusty136
this is good keep going
7/2/2012 c1 lymli
wow, it's meaningful
7/2/2012 c1 11a-creative-name
Wow. So simple and yet it still leaves such an impact... great job!:)
7/2/2012 c1 10DappledKarma
Very simple and effective. It gets me thinking. :D
7/2/2012 c1 25Singing A Silent Song
This is good. It manages to convey the meaning without going on and on. Good one!

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