for Portal's Mind8/2/2012 c2 
5SimonClemens
I liked it.
The 'bits and pieces' style of the entries really helps with your direction, the short and sweet bouts of the creepy ravings of Portal (glaringly meaningful name) and her mental breakdown. I also look forward to the sequel.
5SimonClemensI liked it.
The 'bits and pieces' style of the entries really helps with your direction, the short and sweet bouts of the creepy ravings of Portal (glaringly meaningful name) and her mental breakdown. I also look forward to the sequel.
7/7/2012 c1 1Saint Sentiment
Cool story. You hadn't specified as to whether it was a one-shot or a continuous story, but if you didn't have anything further planned for this, it's fine as a stand-alone. When she mentioned she was given audio files to listen to, I thought immediately of binaural beats - which personally give me headaches, so I have to stay away from them. Anyway, it was a creepy little piece. Good work.
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1Saint SentimentCool story. You hadn't specified as to whether it was a one-shot or a continuous story, but if you didn't have anything further planned for this, it's fine as a stand-alone. When she mentioned she was given audio files to listen to, I thought immediately of binaural beats - which personally give me headaches, so I have to stay away from them. Anyway, it was a creepy little piece. Good work.
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