for Vodka7/12/2012 c1 
5J.D. Vincent
This is great. I liked how you communicated the surroundings through the dialogue. Also, a lot of the time, when you read stuff that's just speech, it gets difficult to tell the characters apart, but because they had different voices (drunk/sober) it was easy to tell the difference. I think a tiny bit of description might have helped it out (to get a better idea of the characters) but obviously that wasn't possible if you were sticking to the just dialogue idea.
5J.D. VincentThis is great. I liked how you communicated the surroundings through the dialogue. Also, a lot of the time, when you read stuff that's just speech, it gets difficult to tell the characters apart, but because they had different voices (drunk/sober) it was easy to tell the difference. I think a tiny bit of description might have helped it out (to get a better idea of the characters) but obviously that wasn't possible if you were sticking to the just dialogue idea.