for Revenge8/31/2012 c7 AoideMythos
I just LOVE detective stories! Especially when siblings have to work together!
I just LOVE detective stories! Especially when siblings have to work together!
8/31/2012 c3 AoideMythos
Another Peter, James, and Lydia (not a bad thing, I think those names sound cool!)?! What a memory! He doesn't need to blame Peter though, or even take Sea! Errr...
Another Peter, James, and Lydia (not a bad thing, I think those names sound cool!)?! What a memory! He doesn't need to blame Peter though, or even take Sea! Errr...
8/31/2012 c1 AoideMythos
That's just like a nightmare I had once (but I gave much more different info)! I woke up after so I didn't get to see what happened next... going to the next chappie!
That's just like a nightmare I had once (but I gave much more different info)! I woke up after so I didn't get to see what happened next... going to the next chappie!
8/30/2012 c12 AoideMythos
Woah! I love this story, it's great! What gonna happen to Lydia?! Gotta find out!
Woah! I love this story, it's great! What gonna happen to Lydia?! Gotta find out!
8/10/2012 c12 
26HSH
Aside from the lack of description, somewhat out of place dialogue, and one-dimensional villains who are barely explored, this was a worthwhile read. I'm saying this because I don't know how long you've been writing or how old you are so I'm not going to outright say how bad or good it is. I definitely see that you have talent. I'm sorry to nitpick, I tried to keep it brief though, there was plenty more that I could have said. I hope you weren't offended by anything I said because I only said it to help you get better.
26HSHAside from the lack of description, somewhat out of place dialogue, and one-dimensional villains who are barely explored, this was a worthwhile read. I'm saying this because I don't know how long you've been writing or how old you are so I'm not going to outright say how bad or good it is. I definitely see that you have talent. I'm sorry to nitpick, I tried to keep it brief though, there was plenty more that I could have said. I hope you weren't offended by anything I said because I only said it to help you get better.