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7/24/2014 c1 Nabs
Nice to read da next chapters
7/23/2012 c1 2Irony'sFriend
Wow...I really liked this. You kept the same dark, haunting tone through the entire story, and the description added to that swimmingly. Also, I like the characters and their tragic love story all linked back to a little girl.

The only criticism I have is just small errors. There were just a few areas where a comma was needed, and there was one place where you wrote 'living' but forgot room. Just simple stuff that only a little editing will fix.

I do kind of wish you would have delved a little deeper into Lorie's emotions. I understand why Mason comitted suicide, but Lorie's was a complete shock to me. If that's what you meant to do, that's great, but otherwise, I would have liked to see Lorie struggling with her depression and not just going to the graveyard for Mason's sake.

Still, I loved the story, and I thought it was a perfect mix of romance and horror. Great job!

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