for You know me8/9/2020 c1 
15Encore19
Some of the lines here are great, like the "ticking time bomb, but you tick me off" and "I'm never there when you do need it". Good work with this
15Encore19Some of the lines here are great, like the "ticking time bomb, but you tick me off" and "I'm never there when you do need it". Good work with this
4/5/2015 c1 brandedinferno
Okay.
I like the push and pull of the speakers mind and how he/she views their opposite. I think it suits relationships eve ones that are dysfunctional and even ones that are perfect. There's always a push & pull.
Okay.
I like the push and pull of the speakers mind and how he/she views their opposite. I think it suits relationships eve ones that are dysfunctional and even ones that are perfect. There's always a push & pull.
5/21/2014 c1 Testimony to Christians
"I'm as careful with you as I am with nobody else" - for some reason this line really struck me but my favourite is the last line: "you know me better than I know myself".
This is what I'd call poignant. I love the train-of-thought style and it shows a progression or transformation in their (or 'your' should I say) thoughts while still remaining stunted in others, which only adds to the realism of the voice. You love this person even if it means accepting their (from the sound of it) very flawed nature, and that to me, is the definition of the word.
It worries me somewhat to read the "physically and emotionally" part :(
There is a line to how far a person can go to help someone if they aren't ready to accept that they need it and start to face the problem(s).
I love your writing because you manage to successfully convey the emotion and state of the character but reveal only so much as is necessary - I am constantly wanting to read more. That's definitely one of the marks of a good writer!
"I'm as careful with you as I am with nobody else" - for some reason this line really struck me but my favourite is the last line: "you know me better than I know myself".
This is what I'd call poignant. I love the train-of-thought style and it shows a progression or transformation in their (or 'your' should I say) thoughts while still remaining stunted in others, which only adds to the realism of the voice. You love this person even if it means accepting their (from the sound of it) very flawed nature, and that to me, is the definition of the word.
It worries me somewhat to read the "physically and emotionally" part :(
There is a line to how far a person can go to help someone if they aren't ready to accept that they need it and start to face the problem(s).
I love your writing because you manage to successfully convey the emotion and state of the character but reveal only so much as is necessary - I am constantly wanting to read more. That's definitely one of the marks of a good writer!
1/6/2013 c1 6Lulu the Llama
What you have - about your writing - is something we can all understand, and that's what pierces the most. This piece reminded me of so many things, and it was very touching to experience.
Especially the contradictions, and your spot on uses of them.
Thanks!
6Lulu the LlamaWhat you have - about your writing - is something we can all understand, and that's what pierces the most. This piece reminded me of so many things, and it was very touching to experience.
Especially the contradictions, and your spot on uses of them.
Thanks!
10/9/2012 c1 4ImmanenceEnsured
This doesn't feel like a poem but... it was nice.
I would love to see this in prose format also - just a little thought, no obligations - because it really feels like you're talking to someone (the words ànd the sentences)
This person comes alive a little bit. They're interesting and real, and frustrating even, in a wonderful way:)
4ImmanenceEnsuredThis doesn't feel like a poem but... it was nice.
I would love to see this in prose format also - just a little thought, no obligations - because it really feels like you're talking to someone (the words ànd the sentences)
This person comes alive a little bit. They're interesting and real, and frustrating even, in a wonderful way:)
9/23/2012 c1 2ohsocyanide
This is a really contradictory piece, I noticed, but I do like it. There are a lot of different emotions which sort of conveys just the vastness of the spectrum of human emotions. A lot of people feel a lot of things, and I like how you've portrayed that in this poem.
2ohsocyanideThis is a really contradictory piece, I noticed, but I do like it. There are a lot of different emotions which sort of conveys just the vastness of the spectrum of human emotions. A lot of people feel a lot of things, and I like how you've portrayed that in this poem.
7/26/2012 c1 nffhkasjfnbsdkjb
Yeah, I've had relationships like this. I understand these emotions. Your line that starts 'I'm as careful with you...' really touched me:)
Thank you
Suki
Yeah, I've had relationships like this. I understand these emotions. Your line that starts 'I'm as careful with you...' really touched me:)
Thank you
Suki