
10/17/2013 c5
1leavesfallingup
Matt's intentions might be good, but he has too much faith in the school bully. Syrup (the name says it all) would say anything necessary to cosy up to Matt... and then turn on Cindy later anyway. Matt should be smarter than that, but he has probably been friends with Syrup forever, so he doesn't see the evil side as easily. Besides, the way that he played this with Cindy was cruel and unthinking.
I am increasingly curious about Cindy's dad. I suppose that he will play an integral part in this story? And will the necklace identify her as the secret daughter of some noble family?

Matt's intentions might be good, but he has too much faith in the school bully. Syrup (the name says it all) would say anything necessary to cosy up to Matt... and then turn on Cindy later anyway. Matt should be smarter than that, but he has probably been friends with Syrup forever, so he doesn't see the evil side as easily. Besides, the way that he played this with Cindy was cruel and unthinking.
I am increasingly curious about Cindy's dad. I suppose that he will play an integral part in this story? And will the necklace identify her as the secret daughter of some noble family?
10/17/2013 c1 leavesfallingup
It is good that someone in that school is willing to step in. If bystanders would just find courage then bullies would never have power over others.
It is good that someone in that school is willing to step in. If bystanders would just find courage then bullies would never have power over others.
10/15/2013 c1 ecossine
Hey ! English isn't my first language so I didn't understand everything, but I liked the beginning :D It is really good (But it was a bit predictable that a boy would help her hehe :D) But it's cool anyway :D Keep going.
Hey ! English isn't my first language so I didn't understand everything, but I liked the beginning :D It is really good (But it was a bit predictable that a boy would help her hehe :D) But it's cool anyway :D Keep going.
6/2/2013 c4 xXSamurai-98Xx
UPDAAATE :))
UPDAAATE :))
11/5/2012 c2 yesika0512
I love Merida's hair! -sorry I'm just lacking of words to say.
Ryan Maxwell intrigues me. Maybe because I secretly like bad guys? hahaha :D
I love Merida's hair! -sorry I'm just lacking of words to say.
Ryan Maxwell intrigues me. Maybe because I secretly like bad guys? hahaha :D
11/4/2012 c2
1parisi
Hey, your story is entertaining so far! The characters seem very lively, and the names are interesting! (Syrup...is that inspired from someone you actually know?)

Hey, your story is entertaining so far! The characters seem very lively, and the names are interesting! (Syrup...is that inspired from someone you actually know?)
8/17/2012 c1 yesika0512
Mirame I'll be straightforward okay?
I DON'T LIKE THIS STORY...to end this way...hahaha :D
"Did I got you for a second there?"
Love the story! Easy to follow, easy to read, and exciting.
Mirame I'll be straightforward okay?
I DON'T LIKE THIS STORY...to end this way...hahaha :D
"Did I got you for a second there?"
Love the story! Easy to follow, easy to read, and exciting.