8/10/2012 c1 14RinaJewelz
I didn't feel the first line flowed very well, it sounded awkward which ruined the start of the poem for me.
Think there was a mistake in your second line 'tings' instead of 'things'.
Ending with a question is always effective though and leaves the reader thoughtful, I like that. Good job

Ceri from the Review Game’s Review Marathon (link in profile)